Poem New years starbound

Discussion in 'Winter Holiday Contest' started by knopie, Dec 29, 2012.


I know i'm not good in making poems but did you like it?

  1. Yes

  2. It is okay

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  1. knopie

    knopie Tentacle Wrangler

    Fireworks in the sky,​
    And it is no lie,​
    If i say that i shall play,​
    Starbound that awesome game,​
    Fireworks in the sky,​
    I shall go up very high,​
    And beating the game,​
    That is where i for aim.​
    Fireworks in starbound.​
    That should close that horrible wound,​
    Of waiting for release,​
    That is where i for please, ​
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  2. Sham

    Sham Spoony Bard

    Good stuff. :up:

    I like the use of imperfect rhymes. I have a hard time using them since they always feel weird in my mind.

    Best of luck in the contest, knopie! :)
  3. knopie

    knopie Tentacle Wrangler

    I mostly like them aswel even now i think it's still weird :p
  4. It's pretty good, but don't entries need to be related to the holidays?
  5. knopie

    knopie Tentacle Wrangler

    New year is a holiday where i live :p
  6. Garneac

    Garneac Phantasmal Quasar

    [​IMG]From the contest thread:
    [​IMG]This entry meets the requirements.
  7. knopie

    knopie Tentacle Wrangler

    Thanks for writing that i wasn't sure anymore :p
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  8. Garneac

    Garneac Phantasmal Quasar

    [​IMG]No problem!
    [​IMG]It can be a little hard trying to convey what theme a piece of writing is about. Likewise a reader's interpretation of the theme.
    [​IMG]Anywho, best of luck. =)
  9. You never mention new years, though. Well, I guess fireworks counts.
    I'm guessing the judges won't be too picky, so I think you're fine :)
  10. knopie

    knopie Tentacle Wrangler

    Yea :p i would have made it longer but i was out of ideas aswel so... :p

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