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Diary of a Lone Avali [Discontinued]

Discussion in 'Writing' started by Gilligan Lanley, Dec 20, 2015.

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What's your opinion of the story so far?

  1. Great!

    66.7%
  2. Okay.

    0 vote(s)
    0.0%
  3. Decent..

    5.6%
  4. Needs more work.

    0 vote(s)
    0.0%
  5. GIB MEH MOAR!!!

    38.9%
  6. Pinapple (You know who you are <3)

    22.2%
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  1. Gilligan Lanley

    Gilligan Lanley Hard-To-Destroy Reptile

    Nuuuu! The cliffhanger is too unbearable :nurusad:
     
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  2. Gilligan Lanley

    Gilligan Lanley Hard-To-Destroy Reptile

    HA! Jokes on you, I posted a new log while you were asleep. :nuruevil: :nurudapper:
     
  3. Solar313

    Solar313 Fat Man

    Add an Apex rebel!!!!

    Plz?

    And make it awesome.

    I like your story, but it is missing something. Oh yeah, AN AWESOME APEX REBEL WHO DREAMS OF OVERTHROWING BIG APE AND THE MINIKNOG!!!!!!!!

    (Or, you know, some other guy with a kestrel class ship)
    (Or an Apex rebel with a kestrel class ship)
     
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  4. Gilligan Lanley

    Gilligan Lanley Hard-To-Destroy Reptile

    We shall see. :3

    There's lots I still need to add, but as the last entry left off, something major is going to happen.
     
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  5. Solar313

    Solar313 Fat Man

    Major major? As in an Apex rebel who is running from the Miniknog is going to meet the escaped slaves because he needed to get repairs but then finds that they are all part of the Fates plan to reunite a hero from each species to save all of the galaxies or whatever? Then continues with all out war on the Miniknog?
     
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  6. Gilligan Lanley

    Gilligan Lanley Hard-To-Destroy Reptile

    You'll just to stayed tuned to find out. :nuruwink::nurudapper:
     
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  7. Solar313

    Solar313 Fat Man

    :eek: MUST... SEE... MORE....

    Also, can I be a proofreader?
     
  8. Gilligan Lanley

    Gilligan Lanley Hard-To-Destroy Reptile

    Maybe. We shall see how things turn out. I've got a few people kidna.. I mean recruited to do some at the moment. :3
     
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  9. Solar313

    Solar313 Fat Man

    Just, I need to see more. Still, dont really get the concept. Solarium could be used for powerful armor and weapons. Presuming that they have a workbench/anvil capable of producing Solarium products, shouldent they be more focused on all that? Instead of... feelings. :p

    I mean, at the moment.
     
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  10. Gilligan Lanley

    Gilligan Lanley Hard-To-Destroy Reptile

    The reason behind me choosing Solarium being illegal was that currently in game -glad giraffe-, solarium was has been removed from naturally spawning (without mods), and the only way to get it is by console commands; cheating (or at least in some people's eyes). So I thought it'd be a good idea to incorporate as such into the story. :3
     
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  11. Firepaw Da Cat

    Firepaw Da Cat Cosmos Killer

    Hey, if you do need another proofreader at some point, I could try to help!
     
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  12. Solar313

    Solar313 Fat Man

    yeeeaahhhh, but technicly without anti-radiation bio-implants, wouldent they die or become quite mutated? (Fatal flaw)
     
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  13. Solar313

    Solar313 Fat Man

    Me and Firepaw Da Cat got your back, man.
     
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  14. Gilligan Lanley

    Gilligan Lanley Hard-To-Destroy Reptile

    If I were to go with technicalities, Nezun would have died already without the aid of specialized coolant gear, as her blood would have boiled and killed her. An Avali's blood boils usually around 0 degree Celsius (as it's made of ammonia)

    "This story is based on my experiences as playing the race mod Avali; with a few tweaks for writing reasons! :nurunaughty:"

    I kept true to both game lore and avali lore, but omitted a few things to give myself some creative freedom. As with the case of both Nezun not dying from overheating, and Solarium not killing everyone from over exposure. (Also note, that I did not say that the workers were not using implants. Usually one could assume they are using an implant; as they're dealing with radioactive materials. I should have added it in for clarity reasons though.)
     
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  15. Solar313

    Solar313 Fat Man

    Got it. Anyways, I want to see more :nuruhappy:
     
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  16. Gilligan Lanley

    Gilligan Lanley Hard-To-Destroy Reptile

    There will be more, no worries there. :nuruwink:
     
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  17. Solar313

    Solar313 Fat Man

    Anyways, lets start talking FTL, as in the thrusters and FTL drive.
    Oh and, bio-implants are NOT cheap, so theres that too.

    Eh, whatever.
    Just keep up with the good work! :nuruhappy:
     
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  18. Master Automan IV

    Master Automan IV Phantasmal Quasar

    Enjoyed the new log. It did explain things for me, so don't worry.

    While "Battlefront:Solar313" is talking about apex rebels(rebel scum), I think I should explain my character, since I left you all with a cliffhanger. Buuuut, only if you ask. :3

    EDIT: Im still leaving you guys with a cliffhanger.
     
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  19. Relten

    Relten The End of Time

    Pfffft...my robot eats Apex rebels for breakfast.
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    And Avians, Humans, Glitch, Novakid, Hylotl....Basically anyone who is unfortunate enough to get in my path of destruction.

    BOW BEFORE YOUR MIGHTY OVERLORD!!!
    MUHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!

    The new log is quite interesting.
     
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  20. Master Automan IV

    Master Automan IV Phantasmal Quasar



    Soon, I'm guessing you are glitch 2.0, and is terminating all races. Huh, that's.....I'm gonna write that down.
     
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