Btw I'm gonna go with yes for poll 4. Also, the humans sound pretty OP, I mean just look at their stats everything is 5/5 or 4/5. Make a bit less OP otherwise everyone is gonna take them. (I'm probably wrong about that but what ever)
The Stats are just how much you can have of the stat ,like restrictions, you will only be able to max out 1 stat or something like that. so humans just don't have much restrictions(guess i should have mentioned that ;D) ,but they have only basic in any one proffesion ,where dwarfs can't be charasmatic ,but they have basic knowlage in 3 proffesions. If everyone hates the restriction thing then i think i will remove it ,but imo it just seems realistic.
Neiphlahs "The giants are the smartest beings in the world, so who knows. they might be right..." The Neiphlahs are a religious group of people - brutal and intelligent people. They first apeared together with zorakhulius ships, they were orinary men then ,but 'The Giants' told those men -" the world is falling apart ,and magic is to blame".These 'Giants' formed the group and now hundreds are following their words . The Neiphlahs are now building temples everywhere -training men to fight by their side, and to sculpt plans with them. They use powerful gems and their minds to track down magic people and then slaughter them without even blinking. Soo if you are very ,very tempted to play a magic character, beware of every shadow ,because they are coming for you...
Also a quick question : Are they friends of evil king? Or are they faction that are even above king reach?
Glad you asked . So , they basicaly split from the most human croud (most humans were heading to live in kings cities)when the giants came up to the ships(appearing from almost nowhere) and spread their word, so some humans came with them . And i have to mention that the king came to wallarius for magic ,that's why the neiphlahs kind of hate the king, but they aren't powerful enough to take down the king yet. Also i have to mention that they are kind of a secret group, as in only the high standing persons know where their main base is and what the group is ploting.BUT they are always in reach for those who want to join them , if you join them you won't be knowing much at the start though.
It won't be easy though , so good luck ;D. *Back in Neiphalhs main base* -We found another one with magical powers - a random giant said. Sharpen your blade and take 4 men with you ,he has to die -the giant leader replied.
I forgot about this thread. I'm going to have to read up! Got a good summary, or perhaps the OP was edited to contain all information as it was being presented. That'd be nice.
I just edited the Races and now they all have about the same amount of restrictions, only few races have better proffesion/weapon stats
That's nice, i'll check them out. Also, I hate to be a grammar Nazi, but before the RP begins, you'll want to work a bit on spelling, grammar and style. Above, you misspelled "profession" as "proffesion," stuff like that irritates me to no end. If you're not using Chrome, use it, because it does have a built-in spellcheck in text boxes, which will catch things like that. Currently, your vocabulary is rather basic, and while it gets the point across, it doesn't draw the reader in as much as it could. The concepts are good, so everything's fixable without ripping apart all that you've written. If you don't mind, I changed around your race descriptions to be a bit more vibrant; as an example of what it could be. This could be changed to a less list-like format fairly easily. Dwarves are reclusive, antisocial creatures, who lead isolated lives. Barring extenuating circumstances, they dwell deep within caves, practicing the artsof the stone; mining, gemcutting and blacksmithing. Since Zorakthulius, rarely do they venture to the surface. When they do, it is typically to trade gems for meat with the nomadic Sand Men who wander past their caves. Most surface-dwellers consider them extinct, as the Dwarves so rarely brave the sun and surface world.Most of the information that is in your description is here, but it uses a broader range of words, that makes it feel somewhat less dry. What I often do to write creatively, is use an outlining system. What I might do for something like this is: Dwarves live isolated lives live in caves, mining, gemcutting and blacksmithing used to hunt for meat and leather, before Zorakthulius now trade with Sand Men thought to be extinct Then i'd change the language and order around, keeping it in the same list format that I have. Dwarves reclusive, antisocial. They lead isolated lives. Live deep within caves, practicing the arts of the stone: mining, gemcutting and blacksmithing. Before Zorakthulius, they regularly hunted for meat and leather on the surface. Now trade gems, tools and weapons with the Sand Men, nomads who pass by their caves. Most surface-dwellers consider them extinct, as the Dwarves so rarely brave the sun and surface world. After that, the work pretty much writes itself. I add connecting words between items in the outline, and others to make it grammatically correct. Dwarves are reclusive, antisocial creatures who lead isolated lives deep within caves. Here they practice the arts of the stone: mining, gemcutting and blacksmithing. Before Zorakthulius, they regularly hunted for meat and leather on the surface. Now they trade gems, tools and weapons with the Sand Men, when the nomads pass by their caves. Most surface-dwellers consider them extinct, for the Dwarven race so rarely braves the sun and surface world. It seems like a lot of effort to do something like that, but it's not really. It makes writing the actual work much easier and will keep you from forgetting certain important details. By adding more connecting words, even connecting sentences or paragraphs, you could "scale up" the tone of the work, make it sound more old-timey and epic. While fewer connecting words will make it feel more concise and modern. Also, many of your commas are after the space for some reason, which is distracting to people as anal as me.
I think i mentioned that my grammar and punctuation sucks, it bothers me as much as it does you ;(. I like that you gave me some criticism, no one else seems to dare to do that here sadly . Also i didn't know about the chromes spellchecker, going to use it all the time now. Btw, if you want to you could be the 2nd GM for this RP ,as more and more people join i don't think i will be able to RP with them all by myself and you seem like a good option. I also used your variation of the dwarves description ;D
