Unbound Travels - Starbound Private RP

Character Name: Andrew Tweedledee
Character Race: Avian
Character General Info: Andrew is an 19 year old male Avian. Some words to describe him are friendly, helpful, polite, and bold. He comes from a humble origin but has big plans for his life.
Character Description: Andrew will look very birdish. He has red feathers all around his body along with a mo-hawk for style. He has a go get 'em type of personality.
Character Biography: Andrew comes from a family of bow smiths. His father always encouraged him to follow the tradition and run the bow shop when he became a man. But Andrew has a dream of interstellar travel and adventure. So, when he finally saved up enough pixels to buy enough fuel to get out of the solar system, he left. He seemed well on his way in life until....he ran out of fuel. So, stranded above a plant with a warp drive that takes basic fossil fuels and wood, he decides to explore the planet. What comes next? Only the universe can tell.

 

Character Name: Rue (Short for Ruhezarian)
Character Race: Floran
Character General Info:
Age: 27
Weight: 110 lbs
Height: 5'2"
Personality: Civil, but can be a bit aggressive at times.
Likes: Liquor, Meats, Weaponry, Electronics, Gardening, Dueling
Dislikes: Deforestation, Picked Flowers, Complete Destruction, Stupidity

Character Description: Don't mistake her for a delicate flower, though she loves keeping this appearance. Keeping long leaves and petals very well groomed and clean. If you can even get that close, she has quite a few scars along her shoulders and down her back and chest. One lengthy scar along her side which looked to be caused by a spear. She likes hiding these under the petals that sprout from her neck region, then fitted into her shirt. Unlike her brethren she actually prefers style with fine fabrics and more covering clothing rather than her loin cloths and tribal outfits.

Character Biography: Her tribe wasn't a large one, but they got by quite well. They often would fight and hold arena battles to seek out the strongest. Rue was far from being the strongest but she never gave in. She had killed and fought with her people to the point it always felt so unlike her. She turned to less fighting and found that when she was clean and not covered in sap she was noticed a bit more. Others admiring her for just how she looked, appearance was what she began to use to get her placement. This skill got her to rub elbows with the group whom went out to gather and explore. They were not much of hunters nor warring. The tribe was more thieving, often stealing from the unexpected landing and exploring ships.

While out on a solo outing she was caught stealing from some Avians and Glitches on a ship, after a bit of a struggle they tied her up. They took a long time to decide what they were going to do with her and they'd already left the Floran planet by the time they decided. In turn she discovered something about them. The Merchants. They had goods from so far away, the fabric of clothing drew her attention the most. They saw Rue's interested curiosity in the materials they hung within the ship. They decided she'd work for them to gain her freedom and become more civil. Which gave her a chance to see what the world of being a merchant was about. They took her along with them, and she was more than happy to follow. It was quite the trip, she had become more family to the group rather than a slave. Given her tribal origins they even helped her with learning proper speech. They started calling her Rue rather than Ruhezarian at this point.

A group split off from the small caravan to settle on a planet taking Rue with them. There they begun teaching her a few things. Like gardening, she found herself engrossed in planting seeds and watching them grow. Given her swift learning, they continued onto sewing. Creating designs and clothing that sold pretty well at the markets they would attend. She gained a small reputation for her work in clothing, and decided that she wanted to set off on her own.

They were out searching for materials and looking for a place to mine when they came across a wreaked ship. It was perfect for Rue, it was pretty beat up but she adored the overgrown vegetation along its surface. Setting to work it took her several months to get it back in working condition. In which she was ready to set out, she wanted to find a purpose out there in space. Even just merely strike it out there to find new fashion and trade. With final goodbyes she was off to find a fortune of her own. No one was going to get in her way either.

 

Update just hit= "Server is Full : Max players 8"

...Uh oh

 

Is the server down again? I'm getting two errors. Can't Connect and a Server is Full: Max 8 when I try to connect.

 

Dat ending to the server, tho. Server full: Max 8. Well, gentlemen. I think we have met our nemesis. The player limit.

 

50 pages of aplications and the server limit is 8 people? i have a hard time believing that

 

Chill guys I'm sure there's a work around
The devs definitely know about our server and wouldn't put a limit like that without a capability to change it.

 

Character Name:
Fuyu no ōkami (Winter Wolf)
Character Race:
Avian
Character General Info:
Age:23
Personality: Fuyu is furiously loyal, obidient, and relaxed (or lazy, take your pick). Because of the events that happened early in his life he distrusts anyone he hasn't met before purely from fear.
Character Description: Pure white feathering, huge fan of plumage on his head, he dons the kimono worn by the Okami clan.
Character Biography: Fuyu was raised by the Okami clan (Currently led by Okami Aoi) after his parents were killed by a rival clan's archer who was sharpening his skills. The Okami clan captured the archer who was later killed, they then gained the appreciation of Fuyu. Ever since that ordeal Fuyu has been very grateful to the Okami clan for taking him in, and fights for them with every last breath to thank them.

 

Character Name:
Fandric "Dustoff" Alleon

Character Race:
Avian

Character General Info:
*Doesn't worship Kluex.
*Wasn't born on, and has never been to his "home planet" Avos.
*Is 24 Years old
*Is reluctant to trust other Avian, and wary of other races (most notably the Floran).
*Despite presenting a convincingly laid-back persona, he ensures he never lets his guard down.

Character Description:
*Doesn't wear traditional tribal Avian clothing. No feathers, no bones and most importantly nothing in reference to Kluex. A modern look is much more tolerable among other races, and has served him admirably.


Character Biography:
Although Dustoff was born into a "grounded" family, it was always common knowledge to feign your faith.
Any Avian can rattle off facts about Kluex, regardless of their reverence towards him.
The wearing of tribal clothing, the daily worship at Avian temples... It all seemed so archaic.
He had always wanted to leave his home planet. To meet other races; not for the Avians on Avos but for himself.
Enlisting in the Avian Army would be an easy way to travel and explore, but the ruling party would never accept him, due to his convictions.

The plan was an old one and the execution was becoming routine; pack up everything you can carry, head to a capitol city and find someone leaving the planet.
He had found nothing, and knew he'd be returning home once again that evening. He retreated to a local bar and sat alone at a table, exasperated.
A few more drinks into the night, a drunken patron sat right next to him and exclaimed "Praise Kluex for a day like this one, friend!".
"ENOUGH ABOUT KLUEX!" Dustoff shouted.
The entire bar grew silent.
A glitch, approaching from behind set his hand on Dustoff's shoulder. "Friendly. There you are, Don't we have somewhere we need to be?"
Dustoff, Immediately aware of the Glitch's intentions replied "Ahhh, Buddy! I've been looking for you! Yes you're correct, look at the time!".
A distance away from the bar, Dustoff turned to the Glitch and thanked him, sincerely.
"Dismissive. We are aware of Avian customs, I simply assisted in your departure." The Glitch replied.

They quickly formed a friendship and Dustoff found himself traveling through space on his new friend's ship, learning the basics of piloting in the process.
A large deal came through and the Glitch found himself as the owner of not one, but two star ships.
The ship was presented as a gift, an offer more bountiful than any he'd seen before. With great reluctance, Dustoff accepted. They struck a deal; his new friend was searching for something.
This was indeed a generous gift, but also a way to cover twice as much ground. Dustoff promise to return- not if, but when he found what his friend was looking for.

A new chapter of his life was about to unfold. One of freedom, discovery, and opportunity.

 

Max limit 8 is gone for those wondering

 

Are they still evaluating profiles tonight? Just curious is all.

 

Character Name: Jordan
Character Race: Human
Character General Info: A young Man early 20's, likes mining. He enjoys having company to occupy him. He also loves traveling a lot to different planets and such.
Character Description: He has a Black Jacket with a blue under shirt with brown leggings and a iron helmet
Character Biography: Jordan left home in search of an adventure. With no experience and no real knowledge of how to survive he got on cheap ship he bought and left without fueling it up. He now is left stranded above a planet.

 

It's going to be interesting to role play as a glitch that dislikes Floran as many Florans and Glitches get along due to the hive mentality as well as the fact that Florans have little use for glitches due to their uneatable parts.

ACCEPTED FOOL!

I don't really get what is going on in that second paragraph at all, can you revise it and make it more understandable? Frankly, the writing seems to be all over the place. Also you might want to consider checking your application for errors. In addition, you mention Schmoop's character, is it fine to mention this by Schmoop herself? Since Alice (Schmoop) is not on I cannot confirm this. I will ask her while you work on revisions. Thank you.

Overall: Your writing has gotten better since last post but I feel your personality as well as name is too weighed down by tropes and you are relying too heavily on them. A lot of the writing was unnecessary. Despite I said to expand the bio, I don't need unnecessary characters like Riley cluttering it up as this is suppose to be around Wolf. We don't need much dialogue in it. I also wouldn't rely on tropes to guide your personality as they generally don't work out on RP, it's like writing a book with fantastically amazing popular personality characters but they cannot work well together to help the story along.

Name: I would consider changing this to a normal human name, maybe even something that sounds like your character. You can later establish your nickname to be wolf... but let's be honest, no one would name their kid just wolf. Try to make a first and last name. Despite that people don't know your last name, the writer should have some last name for him. Since people can't Meta-game, despite it says like T.G Star or something, you could say your name is Wolf or TG or something like that. They will not be able to predict your last name.


Personality: "He has a twisted mind overflowing with dark thoughts. Most of the time he is in control of his actions and he won't terrorize others, but when he is insulted he isn't far from bursting into a madman. He is ethically somewhere in between ''Good'' and ''Evil''." Being suicidal. You can have some fun with tropes but don't let them guide your character or it will be hard to actually roleplay here. The dark hero or lone wolf person especially as everyone wants to be "THAT" character.

Look over the bio. There are a lot of errors that need to be adressed.

I'm going to accept you this time. A lot of the problems that I addressed seem toe be covered in the rewrite. While there is still some problems, they should be flushed out in RP hopefully.

ACCEPTED FOOL!

I think you should describe some more about yourself. Can I download the personality DLC as well? I like the back story though, perhaps expand on it to build your personality?

Should it be Knight or Kight? Also can you explain why you are so fascinated in glitch history? There doesn't seem to be any motivator at all in your past. Also An anarchy town sounds kinda weird doesn't it? I would just get rid of the town idea and focus more on your stability after an attack. It wouldn't make sense for a town to exist if they were every man for themselves right unless you can explain that in greater detail. Also... pursuit.

Overall: There are a lot of problems going on in this. First... "a G.I. Joe" looking fellow is pretty bad description. Beyond this, earth was suddenly attacked and destroyed as far as lore goes. You have a numerous amount of errors in your biography and character's general information. "He's like your..." You don't need this. Just say that He is a regular solider.

You need to work on everything pretty much. Go back and correct the errors in the writing and then you need to expand your biography and fix your Character General Info and Description. Keep working at it.

We have some problems with characters of this style. Stating that you always look beautiful and such just seems off putting. You can't just claim to be beautiful or use such things for your role play. The tropes that you use are tropes that anime characters use and I believe we have a problem with this type of character description in general. You need to tone down your character and try again. This is however just too much. Try working with your character and give her flaws (not flaws that can be perceived as moe) but flaws in general. No one likes a character that is flawless even when she has those not flawed imperfections.

Yes... yes everything looks in order.... wait a minute...!? Why the hell are all the parental units' last names different?!

However, despite this, your character checks out. (Beyond one other thing that might just be an error on my part but I am not sure florans actually have ships of their own. These are usually stolen ships.)

Anyways... I'm going to just leave this here for you. You're welcome. ACCEPTED FOOL!

 

Okay, I think this is the fifth time my profile was overlooked again. If there's a problem other than using something other than the basic template please PM me. Even if the characters not going to get accepted at all, please PM me. Contact me regardless because each time I've said something I feel a cold silence. PM me with whats going on, good or bad news. Please, at least do that much.

 

Laviscar.... did you not check your pm that I replied to? You should really go ahead and do that.

 

'I have not detected a new post from you in a while beyond stating that your new post has not been checked. If you have been editing your old post, we cannot see that and we don't have the effort or man power to search back and look for it as there are literally pages upon pages of new submissions each day. You need to post your full application again or email me a link to the page in which it is revised and I will get it resolved. However. I looked back at previous pages and have not seen it uploaded as of recently. I'm sorry that this happens but I can only review so fast and so competently. If you see people being reviewed that have come after your post then it means I missed you so feel free to pm me with details and I will sort it out. Thank you very much.

 

Character Name: Rumex Bloodflower
Character Race: Floran
Character General Info: age - 27 human years; sarcastic, carefree, lazy, clever
Character Description: Red skin with black leaves. Has a slim build but does not look skinny; he is rather muscular for his size. 5'11 in height
Character Biography: Rumex is from a tribe of florans who have a long lineage of pillaging and war. They do not refer to themselves with a unified name but rather after generations of raiding star systems, those who fell under their wrath began to call them "Bloodflowers". Once every few hundred suns, a floran with a genetic mutation will be born with red skin and black leaves. Traditionally these florans are honored and respected as great warlords and are given the surname of "Bloodflower", but Rumex had different interests in mind. When he became of age and his flower (which he has styled to look akin to a mohawk) spurted he set off on his first raid. As the first Bloodflower that has appeared in almost 2000 suns, the birth of Rumex greatly pleased his people.

The raid was going well, the landing party found a small hylotl planet and Rumex was leading the envoy. He quickly got his first kill, followed by many more. But as soon as he entered the underwater city of the hylotls, he quickly became distracted. He was more interested in their forms of entertainment, art, and of course - treasure. Bloodflowers had a tradition of killing off everyone before they begin to plunder the goods. This was very well known, but Rumex did not care. He was more interested in collecting unique treasures, experiencing different cultures and exploring exotic planets. This doesn't mean he had anything against killing; he would not hesitate to harm anyone who got in his way but unlike the rest of his tribe who seemed to take up killing as a sport, he found it boring and dull.

Eventually, after 5 more raids ending with Rumex getting distracted and sidetracked, the elders of his tribe had enough. While they were raiding a small apex settlement, elite soldiers were sent to kill Rumex. They thought that he was not fit to take the unfilled position of warlord and decided he was an "embarrassment" for finding entertainment in things other than killing. Rumex was clever for a floran and foresaw that this would happen, before the elites could get a hold of him he had already got on a small apex ship that was covered in vines. It seemed to be abandoned so nobody took notice of it. He quickly made his escape but there was not much fuel left in the tank. Now Rumex is stranded, orbiting a foreign planet. Though now alone, he is finally able to freely do as he pleases. He can now explore the vast amounts of star systems and horde all of the unique loot he finds. He also is on the hunt for a new planet to live on, one with cherry blossoms and green grass as it resembles his home planet. But first, he needs to find some coal...

3. If you aren't near the person who sent the message in planet chat - you didn't hear it. (How close do you need to be? On screen? Some people have screens at a closer/farther resolution.)
2. Avoid deaths. If someone resists, beat them in character. Kidnap them, torture them. However, no one likes their characters dead. You may if both parties agree, but would you be happy if your character died and you had to re apply? Did not think so! (Does this mean that if my character dies once then I can't play on it anymore? I sometimes experience a bit of lag and it can make combat at the starting level difficult.)

 

Character Name: Bunsen II
Character Race: Glitch
Character General Info:
Age-22
Personality-Bunsen worked hard for what he and his family had, it was in his nature to do his best. He reads books regularly and spends a lot of time alone. Bunsen hates exploring, he hates going outside, and hates flying. He is an expert guitar player.
Character Description:

Character Biography: Bunsen II is the son of a glitch blacksmith, Bunsen I, born and raised in a normal medieval glitch town. Just recently the town was attacked by a group of avian pirates leaving Bunsen alone in the world with nothing but a few coal pieces left over from his fathers furnace and a barely functional ship. He worked his way through the mines gathering up enough supplies to leave his home world. He knew he couldn't stay after what happened. He set out on a journey to study the glitch, and what causes them to break free of their limits in the hopes that by helping his people develop, they will be able to defend themselves from the advanced technology they face today.

 

Character Name: Alexis "Sparky" R4500
Character Race: Glitch
Character General Info: Age: 24 Solar cycles. Sex: Male.


Character Description: (On the back of the packaging, that Sparky's thought processing module was shipped in.)

"Thank you for buying Alexis made parts! Not only are they safe, reliable and replaceable Alexis parts are made with some of the most rare materials that can be found in the Alpha sector! Yes thats right, this Thought processing module has real Gold in it, which allows a .76 of a nano second faster processing speed! Much more than that of any other leading competitor. Remember, the R4500 model is an experimental module. If there is any unsatisfactory situations caused by the experimental module, please return the module with proof of purchase and we will refund you with a older, but more reliable module.

Alexis Parts, pushing the boundaries of science!"

Character Biography: Reminiscent. I remember a time, back when I was first born, I was barely five seconds old when my mother powered me on and I remember seeing stars. Factual. It was a clear night, 14'C, a light easterly wind. Confused. I remember that I was outside. Correction. We were outside. Reminiscent. and as I looked at the stars, I found that I felt at home. Clarification. I found that when ever I looked at the stars shining brightly above me, I felt safe. Adamant. I made a promise that I would always be a part of the stars. Curios. But how would I do it? Would I be a researcher, an adventurer or even someone who just mapped where all the stars were? Confident. But I do know now. 24 years of thinking, putting forth what I might do and become has come to this moment. Sure. I will be all that I have ever wanted to be. Clarification. I would be a researcher, when I would need to learn new things. I would be an adventurer when I needed to explore and I would map the starts when I needed to find something new. Confident. No longer would I be tied to the hive minds ideal of one Glitch being used for one job its whole life, I will not be forced to be only one thing. Courageous I am what I wish to be! Factual. I'm not the only one. There are others, not only Glitch, who feel the same way. Confident. I'm sure I will find them and I'm sure we will travel the stars together.

 

I recommend a last name. Beyond this I like the top part but I feel you could expand the biography a bit more, it seems you skipped around a few important things you should expand upon for your personality. Also, it might serve purpose how exactly you got your spaceship and how you are able to use it in the first place.

As a rule of the admin he must be 20 years or older unless it is absolutely 100% I will die if my character is not 19 years or younger reason. Beyond this you need to expand on this. You do not have amnesia, just your glitch. Tell me the biography and such of your glitch. Many glitch exist from the hive mentality, is there a reason this one is not of the hive mentality and what exactly happened? OUT WITH IT MAN!

Your character will require a personality of some sort as there appears to be none beyond that you like music. You might want to lay down the fantasy wording such as touch of magic and explain it more realistically as, many enjoyed the sweet sounds that she made amongst the tribe, race blah blah blah. How did she leave her planet? The biography could use some more wonderful expansion.

ACCEPTED FOOL! However, I have noticed that you have posted in Elysium Mild RP as the same character. You are allowed to do this of course as I cannot prevent you from being in another RP but you must start as a fresh new character. Premades are not allowed and are a ban-able offense thank you!