Unbound Travels - Starbound Private RP

Character Name:
Trinstin Covich
Character Race:
Human
Character General Info:
Age - 17 / Personality - Shy, aloof, coy / Height - 5'5 / Weight - 149'lbs /

Character Description:
(I drew this image myself)
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Character Biography:
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First time making a legit story so.​

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Trinstin Covich was your average, everyday kid, with an average, everyday life. He didn't ask for much, nor did he even speak, for his constant fear of judgement kept him mute for a vast majority of his life. He was an outcast, a nobody, no one liked him or ever gave him the time of day. He often questioned why he was ever brought into existence. Constant suffering, heartbreak and turmoil befell him day after day. He begged desperately for a sign of escape, but alas nothing came to him. He spent most of his time, in his room wasting his life watching his television, not knowing where to go on from that point in time , but then something happened. His young mind was captivated by a commercial. Bright lights flicked on his television screen, explosions, excitement galore, then in the midst of all the explosions a man can be heard speaking. "Do you want to be strong? Do you want to be tough? Do you want to break the shell you call a life in half? If you answered yes to any of these questions, then come on down to your local U.S.C.M foundation, and sign up! Your name can one day echo through the halls of space! You can be a hero, saving galaxies throughout the stars! So don't just sit there, and stare at your tv! Get up and be a hero! Join the U.S.C.M today!"

His mind was set, his will reconstituted, and now a goal stood before him. Young Trinstin told his parents about what he wanted to do with his life, he raved about how he can finally become a somebody, accomplish something, accomplish anything. His parents were reluctant at first, but then they saw the young mans passion, they didn't want to step in the way of what he thought was the right thing to do, even if it meant giving up their son. So with that passing note Trinstin started to pack his belongings, his face filled to the brim with excitement, a smile that hasn't ever been seen, now is permanently plastered on his mouth. He walked out the door, he said his goodbye, and he left of to make his future.

When he arrived he saw people like he's never seen before, big, small, fat, and tall, if you could name it, it was their. He was amazed at the sight, but was quickly brought back to his senses when he notices his stature compared to the adonises before him, but he didn't let it get to him for long, he marched up to the sign-up booth, and put down his name, clenching his fist, and saying "Yes! This is the time, this is my moment. I'm finally going to be somebody!" He walked merrily out of the booth catching the attention of the people around him, the faces that were given to him were those of disbelief, and shock, but most of which were faces of laughter, the floor echoed with people saying "What a runt like that? Be a marine? Please he can probably barely tie his own shoes." Once again he was ridiculed, and taunted. He soon beat a hasty retreat to the U.S.C.M orientation, and that is when it really all began.

Time passed, lessons were learned, and friends were made, but none of that seemed to matter in the end, for the dark times were soon to come. During his solo space flight training, radio signals started coming towards his spacecraft. He listened close to what seemed to be urgent, frantic messages from base. Something big was heading towards the planet, big, and dangerous everyone was to hide in the underground bunkers until danger was evaded. While he was listening he wasn't paying any attention to what he was originally doing. He began to drift into space.

Still unaware, and still listening to the message, he thought about what was coming towards his home, a meteor? An alien invasion fleet? Another planet? His mind raced, and only thought about the possible impending doom, as he pondered the radio chatter had become more, and more frantic people can be heard screaming in the background, children can be heard crying for their parents, and then.... nothing. Pure and total silence echoed through the craft.

He rushed to the back of the ship to finally see himself far from his home planet, now drifting in the push, and pull of outer space, but we he saw after that, will have scarred him forever. A large white light showered the deep darkness of space. It was like fireworks exploding in the midnight sky, bursting with color, and flash, and just like that, his home was no more, crumbling to utter nothingness before him, destroyed with all his friends, and family. His heart had been broken, and tears could not begin to express the pain he felt that moment. It was like time stopped just for him to see that moment last for the longest it could.

We now find him drifting into space, a broken shell, no purpose, no reason. Once again, a young man trying to find himself in the vastness of the cosmos

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Hope it doesn't has TOO many errors

I am also sorry for having a child character, but hopefully you can look past that, hes not too off from the legal age anyways, so please if you can look past the fact that he is younger.​

 

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Hello, again! In my rushing to writing an application for this forum, i did not take the time to read all the other applications, apparently there was another person who used 'Time-travel' as a subject in his biography, so here i am yet again to re-write this appeal and hopefully it will be taken in better!

Character Name:​

- The Master (Used to be known as: Charles Matthews)

Character Race:​

- Human

Character General Info:​

- Age: 56

Personality:​

- Grumpy to unknown creatures, friendly to those who i like, although i am suspicious towards every living soul, my character still has a great hearth to the trusted ones who surround him. Also i like to gather decorative items, lots of them, you could call it an obsession

Character Description:​

- Check out my avatar!

Character biography: (V.2)​

- My story started back when i was only a 14 year old boy with big dreams. I had a normal life, lived on a snow biome planet with my 2 caring parents and my cousin, who was only 2 years younger then i.
My father ran a pub that attracted creatures throughout the galaxy, who also needed their drink on the long journeys they used to make. My cousin and i always talked to the visitors and asked them about their stories, some of them were open about it and others just said "none of your business boy" and turned away from us.
I remember this one time, when there came in another humanoid that looked like some sort of bounty - hunter, he told us all about his adventures and the planet he has seen, the only other planet we have seen was a forest biome planet, but we only saw it at day because it was in the same star - system as ours.
But this man, has seen it all and fought it all, he grew up in a similar way to us, he also had dreams, but he ran away from his home to make them come trough.
The man left and my cousin and i always kept dreaming on and making up stories of us being travelers going from planet to planet, we promised each other to once get on a spaceship and leave our cold, but trusted planet.
As i turned 22 and my cousin was 20, we went out for a night of partying and my cousin got ran over by a hover - bike, sadly he did not survive that night......

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With the last words of my cousin in the back of my head: "Make our dream come trough" i went away from home, our pub had to close and my mother got into a deep depression, i couldn't bare being around there anymore.
I went to the closest space - harbor and started asking around if someone needed a mechanic, one person did, he was called 'The Deliverer' and had to deliver all sorts of packages, he got paid a lot because he never asked questions about it and took every order.
With me being on a spaceship going from planet to planet, making a decent amount of money and having the time of my life everything went as i hoped for, but no...
On one of our journeys we had to go to the infamous planet: 'Charlie-445', also known as 'Little-Yakuza', well, the name says it all.
We landed our ship and as soon as we touched down and got out of our ship, i felt a hard knock on the back of my head and fell down to my knees, everything turned black.
2 days later after being tortured and abused the kidnappers decided they only wanted my boss and sent me away to a small desert - planet, with me being 50 back then and having no place to work, i decided i used the large amount of money i saved up to put it in some resources and allowing me to build my own, cozy, home sweet home.
But i soon started missing the travelling, a lot, it broke my hearth to know that i couldn't go out to other planets to visit them, again i went to a nearby space - harbor and ordered some workers to build a small, simple travel ship for me.
It was finished after 6 years, just as i am writing this down in my diary, it has been 34 years since my cousin dies and now i finally have what we always dreamed of, my own spaceship!
I can't wait to get behind the wheel and to start my journey in the vast galaxy and leave everything i built up the past 6 years.
All i can say now: "Let's go!"
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I hope this story was better then the one before, see you around!

Strudelpopje

 

Character name: Zurtai Marashi
Character race:Hylotl
Gender: Male
Character general info: A peaceful and focused man who avoids combat until others lifes are at stake
age2
Description: A black skin with pink belly large fins also pink
Character Bio: Born on the aquatic world Uyshikaino Zurtai was of course a very adept swimmer, and yet hates getting wet unless fullt submerged. This caused a problem because this planet rained.....ALOT. Eventually his home was attacked by the florans and he being a pacifist wouldn't act until they killed his father and were threatening to seed the world (plant an ever-growing seed that sucks up the water) he then took action he grabbed his late fathers katana and rushed out of the door. He then proceeded to try to take as may prisoners as he could and out of 3,000 there was only 436 fatalities. What he wanted most was to find purpose and this he found in the O'Ruposa sentinels a group of peaceful warriors (kind of like jedi)
"I am here father....I made it"
PLZ tell me before hand if you want me to change it or if it needs to be longer.
THX

 

Character Name:
-Paul Crawford

Character Race:
-Apex

Character General Info: -Paul Crawford is an 26 years old male Apex.
-He was an actor until his parents died.
-Now he's an homeless Apex and trades illegal stim-packs to get some food on his table.

Character Description:



-He is around 5 Feet 7 Inches tall
-He has muscular legs , because he's a runner in his free-time.
-His fur is bright and his eyes are black.
Character Biography:

↓Paul's talent as an actor was discovered , when he was a small Apex.He loved to act and watched many movies to learn the mimic of the popular actors. He hadn't any friends in his scout-troop ,but the nature and the knowledge had prevented him to leave .

↓Paul made his hobby to his job.He was known as a good actor until
his parents were killed by Avian terrorists .

↓ Paul got addicted to drugs and mixed stim-packs , because he couldn't understand why his parents were killed . He lost his job and couldn't pay his bills anymore , but he didn't
care anymore about his life. His fans tried to cheer him up , but it didn't help at all . It even went more in the opposite direction .

↓Paul now sold drugs and guns to the youth generation provided by an human underground boss known through the whole galaxy.Paul got arrested for three years and thought about his past and his life. He still can't understand why his parents were killed by the Avian-terrorists , but he must look up into his future and tries to start a new life .

↓Some weeks after Paul got free he was kidnapped by some henchman of the human underground boss , because he couldn't pay him enough money for the illegal materials. Paul got beaten up and was taken to another planet to survive or to starve.

↓After walking cluelessly around the planet some Avians found him and cured him . They thought him about the Avian-story and some more tipps to survive in the wilds.Some days later Paul went fishing and listened to a conversation between the two Avians , when he came back . They wanted to see him dead , because they found out that he was the son of Maria and Henrik Crawford . Paul panicked , but kept cool .

↓ In the next night Paul
set the tent of the two Avians on fire and started to cry , because he saw these two as friends. He grabbed the key of the Avian spaceship from on of the burned corpses and started the engine . Now he's flying through the galaxy
to relive his time as a scout and wants to see as many breathtaking places as he can , but on the other side he didn't forget who sent him on the planet ,where the Avians lived and so he wants revenge and blood of the human underground boss.

 

Character Name: Keeper
Character Race: Avian
Character General Info: 23 year old. trying to be the best but it is very clumsy
Character Description: Little high, blue skin, spiky hair and a face Dizzy
Character Biography: After the crash on his home planet, Dizzly K. Rose was one of the few surviving
that remained. hear the meeting of survivors avians on your planet, their leader asked them to create a nickname for yourself, that's when Dizzly was appointed Keeper and decided to get away from his home planet and start your adventure ...
accept him please.

PS: Sorry i use tradutor =/

 

The only thing you said that was wrong with my app before was that he was sentient before he was sentient! and You asked if he was a merchant or a gun for hire! I cleared both of those out! what is so amazingly wrong with it that only you can see?

 

Sorry for the late response, sometimes apps can be missed, we're only human.

Accepted

 

No worries i understand thank you anyway ^^

 

Character Name: Marcus Loche

Character Race: Human

Character General Info: Marcus Loche is 32 years old, and at first glance, appears to hold a rather cold and quiet demeanor. To any who might manage to make it past his 'shell', however, they would note that he can also be rather trusting, loyal, and even friendly (Though he may express the later by unconventional means). To any who would betray his trust however, would note that he can be just as vindictive as he is loyal and is definitely the type to hold a grudge.

Character Description: Marcus has a generally standard physique, leaning more on the muscular side, though his body has definitely seen better days, as what was once the body of a fit, 20-year old has now worn down considerably. His hair is jet black, and usually kept shortened, while he also keeps a trim beard which hides a few small scarred over scrapes and cuts along his jawline. His eyes are hazel, and often appear to be rather cold and focused at first glance.

Character Biography: Marcus was brought up in one of the more heavily populated colonies close by his people's homeworld of Earth. A generally well-behaved child with a sense of adventure, his eyes were always set upon the stars. Having lived out his early days in relative happiness with his friends and parents within the human colony, Marcus knew that by the time he had graduated, that his heart simply longed for more from the ever-expanding universe. By the time his graduation from the local academy, word of humanity's first major conflicts with the Avians had just reached the colony, along with a swarm of recruiters from the USCM. Seeing this as an opportunity to finally venture into the universe, Marcus happily enlisted.

The next several years of his life would only be described by Marcus as "Hell". Going straight from his cozy, colony-borne life, to the rigorous training of the United Systems Colonial Marines. The first weeks having days which would begin before even the planet's sun was awake, filled with marching, drills, classes and more marching. Gradually, however, Marcus adjusted to this new life and eventually, what the higher-ups at the training camp would call "Selection Day" finally came. Aspiring Marines would be loaded up into a shuttle at the brink of dawn, and quite simply dumped off in a particularly hostile environment, normally with the marine given a rather limited supply of rations and ammo, while the area would be crawling with less-than-friendly, and rather hungry wildlife. Though none of the potential "dangers" were officially sanctioned by the USCM, it had more or less become a tradition which they believed allowed them to select the 'best of the best', so to speak. As the sun began to set over planet, Marcus would be one of the final marines to emerge from the lush, alien jungle and board the shuttle. He would recall looking around the passenger hatch, which had been full that same morning, and seeing only three of his comrades, all of whom looked rather beaten and scarred. The shuttle would wait another hour before departing for the training camp, with none of the other potential recruits having ever returned.

Having passed his final test, the USCM would waste no time in seeing his deployment to one of the distant worlds to aid in humanity's struggle against alleged alien aggression and though he keeps much of this section of his history self-kept and well-guarded at that, it is not which he chooses to define himself with. Having served for several long years with the colonial marines and having practically witnessed humanity's steady decline following Earth's destruction, Marcus knew that this chapter of his life had finally come to a close. One day, during shore-leave on a small, human colony in the far corners of the Alpha Sector, Marcus had managed to bribe one of the local merchants to allow him to stow away on his vessel for passage to one of the more neutral colonies. There, he would take his entire life's savings, money earned through his countless years of service to the USCM, and purchased a small, humble starship. Knowing that he would never really be able to turn back to his comrades after such a defection, Marcus had finally reached the point in his life which he had dreamed of ever since his childhood and he embraced it. He would now begin life anew, as an explorer of the stars...

 

Character Name: Wally D. Triodine

Character Race: Floran

Character General Info: Age 20, He is a treacherous, coy, and stealthy individual. Companionship is his lowest priority, for he sees himself as a lone wolf of sorts, however he is occasionally reckless and arrogant. But there is a good side to him, because when he can make the decision betwixt good and evil, good is his path.

Character Description: A green-teal pigment covers him, save for his hair which is a sky blue. He wears a thieves hood along with black clothing.

Character Biography: Born from an unknown family, Wally grew up without a home and more importantly, moral guidance. By age 12 he had already joined a band small of thieves and with their help had robbed 6 merchants, but to Wally this was just the beginning in his life of theft, for when he turned the age of 18 he found himself infiltrating a military base to acquire his first gun, when Wally and his cohort thieves were spotted were being gunned down. Thinking quickly, he abandoned his fellow crooks and ran for the nearest getaway he could find, a refueling ship with fuel enough to get him out. As he started the vessel and began to take off, out of the corner of his eye, one of accomplices latched onto a ledge on the side of the ship. Wally had to choose to either help his friend or to get rid of him altogether. He chose the latter and took off with the hopes of never remembering his own choice.

 

Character Name: Erwin Freiburg

Character Race: Apex

Character General Info: A thirty year old apex, straight type and loves good cooking.

Character Description:



He is about 1,86m tall, weights about 85kg and got blue eyes.
His uniform looks always cleaned up, like himself and every gesture he makes could be a sign of arrogance.

Character Biography: As a soldier, you simply take orders and fulfill it.
Once Erwin himself was a low rank officer , who sacrificed his own troops to fulfill his orders.
But victory for one was a lost for the other one.
At some point in his career, Erwin just to ok a scoutship, a few loyal man and sets a course who brought him to the alpha sector.
His own story and order´s began...

((English is not my first language. Hope my descriptions are enough to join you If there is something wrong or could be better, than let me know it.))

 

Character Name: Avos Hawk

Character Race: Avian

Character General Info: Age: 22. Straight orientation. Talented at archery, one handed swords and able too see over a mile away.

Character Description: A 1.7m tall black bird with thick beak. Dark black eyes that are impossible to decipher if looked into.

Character Biography: I was forced to steal my masters ship and plug in random coordinates of the galaxy before I was executed for treason on my home planet. I discovered the secret that the village leaders were stealing and implanting eggs with monster DNA attempting to create a hybrid "avian super race". I could not look away while countless sacred eggs were sacrificed. I believe that our race will evolve through technology, knowledge, and interactions with the other great races, not modifying our own genes that the Great Eagle of old bestowed upon us all.

My true story begins now as I land on an unknown planet with nothing but an old sword, I must survive at all costs.

 

(Halcyon network forums name is Teyori)

Character Name: Teyori Petalin (Pronounced Tay-ur-ee Peh-Ta-leen)

Character Race: Floran

Character General Info: Teyori's tribe didn't count in years (didn't even know what years are) so her exact age is unknown even to herself, but she's most likely in her early twenties.
She was raised to be a skilled hunter with good survival skills, but she is also uncivilised and very reluctant to trust anyone other than fellow Florans (and even then...). Very territorial, if Teyori believes she is under threat she will charge immediately at the intruder with murderous intent, and will most likely feast on their remains if she finds herself short of food.
Because of her background, her language skills are rather... below average: her sentences are short and abrupt, and she frequently refers to herself in first person.
Teyori's knowledge regarding technology is also extremely limited, and in her eyes is 'magic'.

Character Description:

Might draw a proper picture of her later. She is quite short and skinny but with strong muscles, which means her fighting style mainly centres around agility and stealth. Almost always tense, in a fighting stance, ready to defend against ambushes. Her black eyes are large and glassy.
Her clothes are mostly made with the skin of animals, and not with fashion in mind. Both unaware and uncaring of this 'hygiene' thing, there's rarely a time where she isn't covered in dirt and possibly speckled with the blood of monsters she hunts.

Character Biography: Teyori was born and raised in a Floran tribe of fierce hunters, thriving on a planet covered with dense jungles. The tribe wasn't particularly large but it was
spreading at a sure pace, the dominant residents of the planet as far as they knew. However, they had not yet started to toy with technology so their traditions and living conditions were very basic and uncivilised.
So it was a surprise when a huge spaceship came barrelling towards their village from above and crashed into the ground, crushing multiple tents and villagers and leaving a huge crater in their beautiful, lush grass. Despite the impact, the strongly built ship sustained little damage. Same with its pilot, a human adventurer who had apparently lost control of the ship, however, he didn't last long with a crowd of angry Florans waiting for him outside. Let's just say the surviving villagers got to taste a new kind of meat that night.
The Florans were perplexed at this huge, metal... thing that had disrupted their daily routine, and were reluctant to investigate.
Teyori stood up first, curiosity overshadowing fear. She searched the ship, digging around in its storage to find even more strange items. Things got bad when she reached the controls and, feeling more confident seeing as it hadn't exploded yet, pressed a large button without much thought.
There still being some fuel left, the ship jerked forward, knocking Teyori to the ground, and started to ascend into the sky. In a panic, Teyori started pressing every button available and yanking every lever in an attempt to stop it, but her efforts just threw the ship out of control even more, and she soon found herself spiralling into space inside. All she could do was press her face against the thick glass of a small window and watch her planet grow smaller and smaller.
The ship shot through space for much longer, dashing away the last of Teyori's hope of returning. It didn't stop until the last of the fuel was burned up and the ship came to a halt, orbiting a completely alien planet, far from home.
It took Teyori a while to figure out how, but once the ship was stable she did the only thing she could do; beamed down to the strange new world to start anew.

 

Responding to apps now, any posts after this one will not be responded to until the next batch of apps.

 

Character Name: Filu also known as Broccoli

Character Race: Floran

Character General Info:
5 years old and fully grown (A young species as said in the description, maybe they grow fast, just interprated by myself.)
Very adaptable person, but also quite bubbly and curious.
Filu prefers fabric clothes to be more flexible and refuses heavy armor.
Her fighting style is more acrobatic with short swords or daggers.
In her freetime she enjoyes playing instruments like the Floran bone xylophone.
Loves Boneboos badly.

Character Description:
Is about 5'0" (1,55m) tall, has pitch-black, almost creepy eyes and a descent sweet smell of fresh fern surrounds her. The skin is pale green as her fern-like hair which sometimes disperses a golden pollen when shaking her head.

Character Biography: The last two years of her life she hid herself on a small green planet found in the alpha sector covered with nothing but wide green lawns emblazoned with red and blue tulips as far as one can see. Only some Avian pirates were "sharing" the planet with her. If she, herself, was strong enough she already had stabed them. Filu has always been suspicious about foreign persons, especially when they were made of flesh. Flesh was something she always detested - as a living creature or even as dead food.

"Why should Floran eat something that is hated?", Filu keeps saying.

Erwin Freiburg, an Apex was the last person visiting her planet. It took a lot of time and the lives of his men who came with him until she was beaten.
After a few months passed little Filu began to "trust" this fleshy ape who lost his crew by the scared Floran and cared about her wounds. Humans of our world would call this Stockholm-Syndrom.

Since then the Apex tries to teach her some weapon skills, reading and social behavior - for him she is just an experiment. There is no choice for her but death. He planed to take her on a journey to other planets as a soldier.
The foreign Apex uses to call her broccoli: a racism term for Florans invented by his crew.

Before the Avian pirates attacked Filu lived in a small, primitive Floran tribe.
The fact that these Florans always defended their homeland with a blind aggressive nature will be their undoing this time.
The thievish birds wiped out the small tribe in a dramatic war which lasted half a year. Only Filu survived, hiding in the underground for years, nourished on fallen Floran, visiting the surface time to time to stock up on some sunshine for a few minutes.

"They had crazy fire weapons making holes in Florans ."

One year passed, after a scoutship lands on this planet.



(I hope my English-"skills" aren't too useless. It has been a while ago since I wrote something in English.)

 

I've yet to recive the new password.

 

Character Name: Dizzly K. Rose
Character Race: Avian
Character General Info: 23 year old. trying to be the best but it is very clumsy
Character Description: Little high, blue skin, spiky hair and a face Dizzy
Character Biography: After the crash on his home planet, Dizzly K. Rose was one of the few surviving
that remained. hear the meeting of survivors avians on your planet, their leader asked them to create a nickname for yourself, that's when Dizzly was appointed Keeper and decided to get away from his home planet and start your adventure ...
accept him please.

PS: Sorry i use tradutor =/

 

Character Name:

Linus Cerdic

Character Race:

Glitch

Character General Info:

Created just 26 years ago with a rather simple desire to farm his boltbulb, currentcorn and automatoe's then sell them on market, his personality is forgiving and rather humble. Upon encountering a problem he will normally go about it in a calculating way, not leaping in, but not hanging back out of fear. Despite this, he is irrationally fearful of Floran's as although they do not want to eat him, they do want to eat other things, and blood is not a good thing. Being ambidextrous and strongly within the lower-class of his race's society has let him thrive where he is, able to feed two chickbots at once.

Character Description:



With a simple build and the good, honest clothing of a farmer, Linus fits in among the other Glitch lower-class all around the universe. His average height of 1.73905 metres exactly also leads to him being the most average Glitch you will see. Simple green eyes glow bright with amusement most of the time, although, upon occasion, they will fade with a slight worry, he is not at all intimidating. His clothes are normally mud-splattered and pockets filled to the brim with seeds of all varieties.

Character Biography:

Created on the forest planet of Alpha Chisti 053 V by two self-aware Glitch he has always lived a life free from the Hive-Mind and the rules of the Kingdoms. His childhood in general was good, and there was never any lack of Bolt-O's or Stuffed Automatoe's upon the table. An only child, with no other influences, he grew up with an great amount of respect for both of his parents, and always strived to follow their roles as farmers. His parents had different ideas, and although they hid it from him, they were poor, lacking in any pixels to buy from the locals (A few families of Avians and other Glitch). They aspired for more from him, more than they could do now, as their circuits grew frayed and wore out, their LEDs slowing fading. Not wanting him to share in their sorrow, they sold all they could, buying a FTL able ship, so that he could escape the monotony of the farming life.

They never understood it was not what he wanted, that he wanted to be just like them, not an explorer but a farmer. To please them, he took the ship, as they leaned on each other, outside of the rural barn and house that had marked the first 14 years of his life. They had taught him everything they knew, but now they wished a different fate upon him. His worst memory is seeing them smile as his ship lifted off, knowing that he only had enough fuel to get to one planet, and that they were happy, where he was not. It was closely followed by his best memory. Setting down, upon this, a different place, a different planet, a different solar system! The soil was good. He had seeds. He could still be a farmer.​

 

Denied - Your character is a bud. Let it bloom out into a flower. Failing that, give us some form of backstory at least.



On it.

 

I spent some time on this one thinking about how you would use this character in game and how it would play out along the others, the cold on the outside nice on the inside personality is so overdone that I'm tempted to deny just for it. Not only this, but the backstory never really goes anywhere. It describes his childhood briefly, goes into his recruitment/training of the USCM and then briefly explains his time with the USCM. Then he just gets up, and leaves. It doesn't go anywhere after that at all. While the backstory showed signs of some good writing I feel as if at this point the character does not have much going for it and I'm going to have to say denied for now. Feel free to put in another application!

This application feels heavily undetailed in all aspects. I see all of the time "mean but GOOD SIDE TO HIM HONEST theres a good side come on dude he's dark but i mean good side" - it's in far too many apps. I have a difficult time imagining him from the description you gave, light blue skin some clothes and.. ? What is there? Nothing. Not only this, but the backstory feels both bland and generic. So, he was adopted or left or.. what? He attempted a robbery, failed, and took a ship but you also noted he was 18 at the time of this part of the backstory. So, how did he end up orbiting a planet without any fuel? This is what I'm curious about, the part in brackets says how did he end up in the situation he is in — orbiting a planet without fuel, this is how your character will start in game. We have no explanation on this, and it cannot have happened shortly after because in the description you noted your character as 20, and again in the backstory you noted your character was 18. With the lack of detail, cliche's and holes like the ones I mentioned I'm afraid this application is denied.

The general info is nowhere near enough information unfortunately for this server, we have no clue about him. So, he's straight, and loves good cooking and..? What's his personality? Where is it? There is none. Along with this, the backstory is also painfully undetailed. So, he was a soldier, he lost someone I'm guessing is what you intended since this is a pretty generic story, and he just one day stole a scout ship and went bye bye. Nothing more, nothing less, no detail. I'd say this is more along the lines of a puppet, and with that I'm going to have to say this application is denied.

This character reminds me of the above one in the sense of being undetailed, while I appreciate the fact you detailed the characters skill there is no personality information whatsoever. We don't know who he is, how he acts and this makes the character pretty much a puppet. Along with this, the backstory seems generic and bland, because it's just mostly the games default story. There is no detail on where he is from, how he was raised, his life before all this and other things I consider needed for a biography. Denied.

While I can't say the story is the most insanely unique I can't help but appreciate the writing and the detail in some parts. Accepted.

This character feels slightly unique, with a few parts felt being a bit forced I'm going to say accepted due to the nice writing and formatting.


To those who were accepted, we have a sort of Mega PM for our IP and password, so we need to wait for the creator of it to add you to the conversation, please be patient.