Finally i had the time to write hope you enjoy! Part 3 Joe got up and followed Lizzie. The station was huge. Large cylindrical steel pillars rose up like giants in the hanger. Huge transport ships sleeping in tier den. Then Joe saw it. A hover copter with the words SL1 on the side and the decal Phoenix. It was his fathers. He collapsed and cried. Here was his fathers ship but his father was scraps of flesh and blood on a non-existent planet. He remembered his father flying to work on it. he name phoenix. his father always said something would rise form his ashes. Lizzie noticed him and walked over. "That was your fathers ship, he went on many missions with her." she whispered. "missions?" Joe sobbed. "Oh... you didn't know?!" "Know what?" Joe said somewhat calmer. "your father was a great warrior scientist and diplomat" She replied more to come sorry about shortness again.
story has a lot of potential I'd like to see more of the main characters personality though right now hes just lost his father I'm guessing only living relative (would love more detail ) but its bean some months as you say and... I'm getting ahead of myself <_< gj and keep doing it
CONGRATULATIONS GUY WE HAVE OUR FIRST HATER OF YOU ARE HE OR SHE PLEASE COMMENT SO I CAN SEND MY FLEET ROUND TO YOUR HOME AND KILL YOU jk if you dont like dont pretend you do.
Random notic apparently my facbook is benig terminated to the child p o r you get the word withc i dont have
Yay more votes!!!! Guys if you like it comment as well as vote please thanks. New part sometime this year
Hi this is a semi boost i have nice idea for next part including ... the avians. I think its really good hope you do to.
Part 4 "The Avian Attack" Joe sat on his polymorphic bed. He thought about the events of the past week. The destruction of his only home, the death of his father. He suddenly choked up remembering how kind and calm his father was even at the stage of his death. He remembered how his father had comforted Joe when his mother had been captured and killed. He got out of bed and headed off to the Medi-Bay to find Dr Coooperr Lizzie had said Joe would need to see him when he felt calmer. "Dr Coooperr?" Joe asked "Yes Mr Star-Tonit?" "Lizzie told me to get a check up for radiation from the explosion" "Ah yes lie down on there" He said pointing at a solid bed on the right of the Bay" Joe led down whilst the laser scanned over him. Suddenly the Station rocked with a deafening sound, Joe was flung across the room. Dr Coooperr Flew towards the space window, he smashed against the glass but he didnt stop there he flew out into deep space. He melted the froze the exploded and splattered the new glass that had immediately replaced the shattered one... End of part 4 Hi guys authors note this is a "2 part part" if you get me. The main attack will be out soon but im on a laptop but struggle to type on it. Next part will be exciting hopefully.
Oops was meant to write about the father more oh well never mind sorry if it didnt flow from part 3 i just realized
Ok i am cancling this thread. There will be a new one up soon with the same story but in much more deatail as i am going to spend lots of time on it.
If anyone wants more of this keep an eye out for the reboot i am finally back active on the forums. The basic story will be the same with more deatail and an new backstory involving my clan "The Shadow Templar's" so keep your eyes peeled i will post a link here.
