Story Edward The World Hero

Discussion in 'Winter Holiday Contest' started by Bughunter, Dec 24, 2012.

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So, What do you think so far? (Scale 1-10. Ten = Best one = worst)

Poll closed Jan 6, 2013.
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  1. Garneac

    Garneac Phantasmal Quasar

    [​IMG]Bughunter did mention this was a work-in-progress.
    [​IMG]That said, yeah, he's about 600 words shy of the 2 000 word marker (not maximum, mind you), so it's in his best interest to include either the holiday or winter themes -- or both -- soon, if he's to be eligible. Though he definitely has Starbound references, I doubt that's enough to stay in the running. (Then again, what do I know?)
    [​IMG]Anywho, Bughunter, two things you want to keep in mind while continuing the story. First, you're changing tenses, sometimes within the same sentence. For example:
    [​IMG]Bolded for emphasis. The tense mix-ups are a bit startling, so I'd suggest clearing that up.
    [​IMG]Second, your opening sentences. They repeat, giving the impression of either redundancy or oversight. Here:
     
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  2. Bughunter

    Bughunter Spaceman Spiff

    You will see that is why its still
     
  3. As long as the finished product is going to be better, I suppose.

    Good luck. :)
     
  4. Bughunter

    Bughunter Spaceman Spiff

    Apparently you can't spell. It's grammar not grammer. And, the story is not finished, so the period is not there .
     
  5. Just leave them be... don't stir up a nest of bees o_O
     
  6. Chimera

    Chimera Title Not Found

    I wouldn't be talking about grammar if I were you.
     
  7. slayer90000284

    slayer90000284 Big Damn Hero

    Whoops. Seems that I only made one mistake, Chimera, but your picture looks like a mistake. (Just Kidding) (LOLWUT?)
     

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