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Diary of a Lone Avali [Discontinued]

Discussion in 'Writing' started by Gilligan Lanley, Dec 20, 2015.

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What's your opinion of the story so far?

  1. Great!

    66.7%
  2. Okay.

    0 vote(s)
    0.0%
  3. Decent..

    5.6%
  4. Needs more work.

    0 vote(s)
    0.0%
  5. GIB MEH MOAR!!!

    38.9%
  6. Pinapple (You know who you are <3)

    22.2%
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  1. Gilligan Lanley

    Gilligan Lanley Hard-To-Destroy Reptile

    Hehe, I'm glad that you enjoyed it. ^.^

    I wasn't sure how to put it, and I wanted it to be lighthearted, but not too obscene that it was just straight up OMG I LOVE YOU blah blah blah. I wanted to make it as subtle as possible, but not to beat around the bush too much.
     
  2. Relten

    Relten The End of Time

    I saw what you did there...heheheheheheh
     
  3. Gilligan Lanley

    Gilligan Lanley Hard-To-Destroy Reptile

    Yay, someone caught on :rofl:
     
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  4. Master Automan IV

    Master Automan IV Phantasmal Quasar

    Oya oya. Nezun to Mira ha issho ni dakishimeru totemo kawaidesu!

    PS.I also posted something in japanese in my profile page.

    PSS.Man, I laughed a bit to hard after making this reply.
     
    Last edited: Feb 21, 2016
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  5. Gilligan Lanley

    Gilligan Lanley Hard-To-Destroy Reptile

    Sadface, I didn't learn enough Japanese yet. I can't fully understand what you wrote >.<
     
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  6. Master Automan IV

    Master Automan IV Phantasmal Quasar

    Well, try using google translate. :3 *cute kawai cat face*
     
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  7. Firepaw Da Cat

    Firepaw Da Cat Cosmos Killer

    I noticed this story a while ago, but I haven't read it
    I keep reading good things about it though, so I'll probably read it soon [​IMG]
     
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  8. Gilligan Lanley

    Gilligan Lanley Hard-To-Destroy Reptile

    I think you're gunna enjoy it :D

    #selfpromotion
     
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  9. Gilligan Lanley

    Gilligan Lanley Hard-To-Destroy Reptile

    I did, and it went flip-floppity. :rofl:
     
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  10. Master Automan IV

    Master Automan IV Phantasmal Quasar

    Well ok.
    It roughly translates to "OMG! Nezun and Mira are so cute when they cuddle together!".:love:

    Yeeeeeaaaah. Its very weird. BUT, thats what i was going for anyways.;)

    PS. This log feels like it belongs in valentines day, so thats how i treated the sentence.
     
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  11. Gilligan Lanley

    Gilligan Lanley Hard-To-Destroy Reptile

    Aaah ^.^

    Hehe, I can see how that works for Valentine's Day :3
     
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  12. ZAYABUCKET

    ZAYABUCKET Ketchup Robot

    I don't know why I didn't read this earlier but I just spent the last 3.5 hours reading it & I really enjoyed it. :up:
    It makes me wish I knew how to English better.
     
  13. Gilligan Lanley

    Gilligan Lanley Hard-To-Destroy Reptile

    Yay! I'm glad you liked it ^.^
     
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  14. Gilligan Lanley

    Gilligan Lanley Hard-To-Destroy Reptile

    Wuuut!?!?!? Two logs in the span of 24 hours?! Gilli, are you smoking crack!?

    No actually, I'm not. Just in a really big writing mood. So here's another entry that's been long overdue along with Entry 9.

    Soooooo, Log 10 is officially up! :D
     
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  15. Firepaw Da Cat

    Firepaw Da Cat Cosmos Killer

    I agree, I just read the story and its really good! :3
    Well, time to go to sleep, I have to be up early tomorrow and- wait, a new entry was just written... Guess I can stay up a bit longer
     
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  16. Gilligan Lanley

    Gilligan Lanley Hard-To-Destroy Reptile

    Must... read... ALL the things...
     
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  17. Gilligan Lanley

    Gilligan Lanley Hard-To-Destroy Reptile

    Still looking for some proofreaders! If anyone is interested, please IM me! :nuruawe:

    As well, any constructive critzisim/comments is always welcome! It helps me learn from my mistakes and to improve the quality of my workings so I give you guys better stuff to read!:nuruflirt::nurudallas:
     
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  18. Gilligan Lanley

    Gilligan Lanley Hard-To-Destroy Reptile

    Still looking for some proofreaders! If anyone is interested, please IM me! :nuruawe:
    As well, any constructive critzisim/comments is always welcome! It helps me learn from my mistakes and to improve the quality of my workings so I give you guys better stuff to read!:nuruflirt::nurudallas:


    NEW AD :

    Are you enjoying the stories I'm putting out? :nuruhappy: Are you well-versed in being the uber-grammar nazi that the internet loves/hates?:nurucool: Do you have some free time, and would like to see the Diary Entries before they're posted online?:nurugasp:

    If you've answered 'yes':nurunaughty: to all of these questions and are still interested in this idea:nuruawe:, then please message me in a conversation and we can start a wonderful friendship in writing:nurudallas:, adventure:nuruninja:, and romance:nuruflirt:!
    Maybe not the last...:nuruneutral: but yeah.. proofreaders needed!:nurudapper:


    EDIT: Got a few proofreaders now, thanks guys!
    Much love!:nuruflirt:
     
    Last edited: Feb 28, 2016
  19. Master Automan IV

    Master Automan IV Phantasmal Quasar

    Also, I would like to know where the "lovey-dovey" feelings came from.
    What made Mira have these feelings for Nezun?

    EDIT: Hopefully I get some clarity in the next log.
    Man, this feels like a soap opera.(An actually good soap opera mind you. Trust me, i've seen some baaaaad soap operas.)
     
    Last edited: Feb 22, 2016
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  20. Gilligan Lanley

    Gilligan Lanley Hard-To-Destroy Reptile

    Well, with Mira having no memory of her past, and most other species keeping distant (including other Floran), Mira became lonely; like most would, that or shun others and grow a hatred for them. When enslaved, things seemed bleak for Mira, and lo-and-behold, her saviour comes along. Nezun rallied the prisoners and became an inspirational figure to most; including Mira, and because of that, the survivors wanted Nezun to be their leader. Nezun showing compassion to all, including the shunned Mira without hesitation. Mira clings to that small strand of comfort that no one else had given her to her current memory, and from there that small feeling of comfort developed into much more. (I hope that makes sense.)
     
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