Digital [Comic] The Whale Fins Ch.1

It has orange eyes! don't trust it!!!

 

Aww, the cute puppy c:

 

AHHH! SO CUTE!

 

oh no

 

Whaa?! A totally unexpected plot twist!?

 

Ooooooh o:
Are we gonna see Birb Mom?

 

Birb mom? You mean this guy?


Ooooh he'll show up eventually.

 

Birb Daddy, yaaaaa

 

Too much update in this thread that I missed, yet, too little to be seen. Im still satiated on these ones. I crave for more.
I'm also studying your style for future reference in making a comic, I hope you don't mind.

I can see that the visuals do speak to the readers, well done.

 

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It was a shiny fox!

 

I like your art style =3

 

Ya, it looks so plushy and cuddly

I hope one day you'll become rich and launch a plushie brand!

 

Hmmm, magic? Or metal?

 

Reminds me of Rimworld mixed with Tomb Raider =d

 

I love the art however I have an issue with the story - the genre seems to fluctuate too frequently for me. Chapter 0 heavily implies a Sci-Fi/fantasy genre. However the first few pages of chapter 1 implies that the story has somewhat scrapped the Sci-Fi/fantasy feel and adopted a horror/survival vibe. What might have been nicer would have been to begin the chapter with when the character finds the fox or perhaps even after that. That way it eases readers into the story and characters. Then when you absolutely need to let the readers know about what happened doing the crash/first 50 days you can slip it into the comics with events that introduce characters pre-crash or involve flashbacks.

I'm not sure if what I just said makes complete sense but I'll use an example. Think Superman. The first Superman comics and movies don't start with him on Krypton or him coming to Earth as it would completely turn the readers perception of what Superman is into a Sci-Fi which is not what DC intended. You don't learn about Superman's home planet or history in general until the readers already have a preconceived notion of what Superman is as a whole.

Hope this feedback helps even slightly in the future of your comic making hobby. Regardless, I'll still be tuning in to see the cute art!

 

I've been worrying for a while that the beginning didn't went of too well though I was more concerned with the pacing than genre - maybe it'll be much less of a problem if Chapter 1 is shorter (or if I stop putting pages at this 1/month+ snail pace) but yeah I do get your point. Hopefully this is minor and will only affect the first part of this story. Thanks for your comment (which is probably the longest one since the start of this, so it kinda means a lot)!

 

Hopefully a fresh set of eyes was helpful.

I can't wait to see your next few posts to see how you adapt and progress the comic.

 

I discovered this ̶t̶h̶r̶e̶a̶d̶ pearl today, just with the Chapter 0 I 'fell in love' >w< I really like the story concept (especially the introduction) and your art, both are great together !
I look forward to your next posts~
~ Kazuki

 

Thanks, mate!