OOC Beyond the Stars (Applications Open)

• Racercana
• Name:Corcinus Borca
• Age:21
• Gender:male
• Short Backstory*:has 400 year life span because of experiments and can use redish shadows to dissapear used to live on a planet called Megaptera novaeangliae
• Descriptionits the character on my pic)
• Personality:a little crazy from being in a solitary room
• Dæmon*:a little skeleton dragon (chinese)that wraps round my arm and when i punch he bites my enemy
• Who are You?*:EXILE

 

This app is... how do I say this... unique. Very... random. Yeti approves

 

I feel like some improvement could be made. There are some interesting ideas for a character here, they just need to be expanded upon. For example, how does Corcinus know that he can live for 400 years? How long has he been alive to learn that? What other character traits does Corcinus have other than being crazy? What was his life like before he became an experiment, or was he born in the lab? Either of those backstories could lead to ideas about how he acts or reacts in the world.

 

Punctuation please... I think there should be a lot more depth ti a character than this... They seem a bit...
Flat...

 

<get da fook away bob

 

• Race: orcana
• Name:Corcinus Borca
• Age:21
• Gender:male
• Short Backstory*:has 400 year lifespan (he heard a scientist speaking about it) because of experiments and can use redish shadows to dissapear used to live on a planet called Megaptera novaeangliae(he was made in the lab he is a modified hylotl he was made into the dominant water race by almost sheer extinction now thats why hylotls live at the bottom of the ocean because orcana he almost died at the age of 10)
• Description the character on my pic)
• Personality:a little crazy from being in a solitary room
• Dæmon*:a little skeleton dragon (Chinese)that wraps around my arm and when i punch he bites my enemy
• Who are You?*:EXILE

 

That's it? No nuances? No quirks? No depth? (No grammar?)

 

Going to agree with him, (not that he's an NSFW Writer nor he has a good OC, but....)

All in red marks are not clear/might anger others/wasn't part of the rules and setting, and those in bold and underline are explanations.

Extra Notes: You're messing up my Grammarly editor...

 

Oi! As a GM, I take offense in that...
(Though I will admit she's not the best iteration of her character.)

 

Whoops. Sorry. ^-^'

 

Hrm. Interesting. Might make an app within the week....

 

DOOOOO ITTT!
You totally won't be getting into to many RPs. It's worth it anyways.

 

• Race - Floran/ Ai. More machine than Floran

• Name - CAINE

• Age - 24

• Gender - Male

• Short backstory -

• " Yeah. Sure. Like I'm gonna tell you my life story. "

• Description -

• Personality - Cold and unfeeling, distant. Hollow.

• Dæmon - A cheery girl named Adrianne....too frickin cheery that is.......She is always happy, no matter what...

" Who am I? I am an outcast. "

Sorry for the briefness of it, and the nonexistent backstory.... I have my secrets...and CAINE is one of them...

 

So... you want to get in?

Hmm... four ways.
1. from the Gateway, towards Aiden's group
2. on a ship, traveling on the Eclipse System
3. Resting on the seventh planet, noticing Sarrti
4. Your own opening.

 

Doesn't really matter to me. But, if he was anywhere, he would be the creator and victor of a massive bloodbath.

 

(( AGH DOUBLE POST ))

I was sneakin round the interwebs, I found something that looks more like CAINE

 

Hey I've kinda been laying off posts where Sarrti's personalities communicate due to the sheer rainbownes of those posts, should I keep doing a reduced number of rainbow posts or go back to the old way?

 

I don't think I can actually accept a bloodbath-starting OC too much, I'll think about it.

Maybe colorful, yes, but using not that colors. Probably tones of blue and green.

 

It's not that he'd start them, he'd just make a smart remark too many and someone would want to kill him.

 

Ah. Well, go to the topic main and post in, then. I'll edit your info in.