Poem An unfortunate Christmas

Discussion in 'Winter Holiday Contest' started by Spire, Dec 26, 2012.


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  1. Spire

    Spire Phantasmal Quasar

    [Caution: SFW]
    Holy crap, it's cold outside.
    Outdoors there's no way I can win.
    Oh, lord, dead mold inside.
    I'm off to the community inn.

    Oh Jeez, there are deadly bugs.
    Where can I go?
    I fall and break a few jugs.
    My misfortune seems to grow.

    I sit and think about the way
    Santa skipped over me today
    and My mind seems to wander,
    And I start to ponder
    in that little hotel chalet.

    I look down
    I look up
    I see my wound
    I taste upchuck

    I start to fade
    I'm not afraid
    Its just a raid
    I had had it made!
    I die and loose half of my gold.

    I punch my computer.
    I was killed by looters!
    I rage and rage and rage-quit with shame.
    {The infamous Spire has left the game}
    Sham, Toady and creepwolf like this.
  2. Sham

    Sham Spoony Bard

    This is a very unique mix of different styles. I found the reveal at the end delightful.

    Thank you for sharing this with us!
  3. Spire

    Spire Phantasmal Quasar

    Thank you for the compliments.
  4. Sham

    Sham Spoony Bard

    You earned them! :up:
  5. Spire

    Spire Phantasmal Quasar

    :) I'm sure you'll win. How long did it take you create your piece?
  6. Sham

    Sham Spoony Bard

    I doubt it, there are a lot of great entries so far, and more to come I am sure!

    Before I posted it I probably spent about 7 hours looking over it, not including all the other time I spent thinking about it when it wasn't in front of me. I still feel like it is missing something, but I don't know what yet.

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