So I decided to do something different... make my own freestyle Christmas Poem from scratch. It's fairly short and I'm not quite sure how this will work but oh well, enjoy! In Search for Love Is there such thing as true love,on a lonely Christmas Day?Is there such thing as true love,past the galaxies and beyond? Is there anywhere out there,in the barren floran land,where I can find my only true love? I have searched from star to star,from wide and far,in desperate search for love,on this lonely Christmas Day. A lonely Floran standing in the cold,Is there love for a battle hardened warrior?My fellow members now show disrespectof what I have become. As I look beyond the hill,I glance upon a house,The laughter echoing still,while I stand alone on Christmas Day. I fall to my knees,with tears streaking down,giving up hope of ever finding true love. Is there such thing as true loveon a lonely Christmas Day?Is there such thing as true lovepast the galaxies and beyond? Is there such thing as true loveon a lonely Christmas Day?Is there such thing as true lovepast the galaxies and beyond?Is there such thing as true lovefor a blood thirsty Floran? Is there... true love for a Floranon a lonely Christmas Day? I plan on editing it a bit more, it could use some fleshing out. Some feedback would be helpful.
A) Yea I'm changing it to a poem and "As you would expect, all entries in the contest have to be holiday/winter related."
Ah, the first true free-style poem entry I have read! I really enjoyed it, but since you asked for some feedback I will offer some. I really like the structure. The elements that you pull in are clearly identified and expressed. The Starbound influence feels like it was an afterthought. I would try to focus more on that. Best of luck to you Scruffy!
I love how a lot of people came to read this and comment on it, since it had the word 'Love' in it? Sister says: "I would've cried if I read it slowly." My expected reaction: . It didn't even rhyme. I thought poems were all about rhymes . This is more like a limerick.
There is such a thing as a poem in free-verse, and limericks have a strict rhyming scheme which this is not like at all.
Tsk Tsk Tsk...That is a rather harsh, and rude comment.. There are multiple forms of poetry, and a Limerick is a form of poetry, is it not?