Diary of a Lone Avali [Discontinued]

Discussion in 'Writing' started by Gilligan Lanley, Dec 20, 2015.

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What's your opinion of the story so far?

  1. Great!

    66.7%
  2. Okay.

    0 vote(s)
    0.0%
  3. Decent..

    5.6%
  4. Needs more work.

    0 vote(s)
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  5. GIB MEH MOAR!!!

    38.9%
  6. Pinapple (You know who you are <3)

    22.2%
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  1. Relten

    Relten The Waste of Time

    And then they banged...Sorry pal, I ain't one for subtlety


    It's pretty adorable though,and it makes sense.

    Edit: Heheheh
     
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  2. Master Automan IV

    Master Automan IV Phantasmal Quasar

    um, not to sure i'm getting it. I would believe Mira would hold Nezun as a very close friend, if that were the case.
    I may need something more.
     
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  3. Master Automan IV

    Master Automan IV Phantasmal Quasar

    Relten my boy. That spoiler just made my day.:sarcasm:
    Don't take this out of context!
     
  4. Gilligan Lanley

    Gilligan Lanley Space Kumquat

    You'll see later in the story, I've got something planned to better explain it/clarify it.
     
  5. Gilligan Lanley

    Gilligan Lanley Space Kumquat

    Too late, I seen the first emoji :nuruwink:
     
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  6. Master Automan IV

    Master Automan IV Phantasmal Quasar

    Well thanks. :)
    I think I'm used to story's that have two characters spend some time together before the possibility of an relationship. Not saying a character can fall in love with another in a short time span, it's been done before and it's been done well.

    So I'm curious to see what happens.:geek:

    Ps. Always put emojis in your comment to get more likes. It always works.;):spider::ninja::fireball::lickitung:
     
  7. Firepaw Da Cat

    Firepaw Da Cat The Fluffy Cat

    Heh, you should've seen the first version of his message [​IMG]
     
  8. Master Automan IV

    Master Automan IV Phantasmal Quasar

    Still I did not mean it to be THAT lewd.
    That's why I changed it.
    Oh, Jesus H. Christ what have I done.
     
  9. Gilligan Lanley

    Gilligan Lanley Space Kumquat

    The irreversible. :nurunega:

    On another note. I do believe that I'll be cluing up the diary fairly soon..

    BUT! I will be continuing the story under a different name. I'm having fun with the style of the diary, but I would like to continue the story in the current tense instead of the past tense.
     
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  10. Relten

    Relten The Waste of Time

    Isn't current and present tense the same thing?
     
  11. Gilligan Lanley

    Gilligan Lanley Space Kumquat

    Blegh, I meant past tense. And this is why I've gotten some proofreaders :rofl:
     
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  12. Firepaw Da Cat

    Firepaw Da Cat The Fluffy Cat

    I meant what Relten first wrote in his message before he edited it [​IMG]
    I mean, I didn't see what you first wrote, but it was probably funny
     
  13. Relten

    Relten The Waste of Time

    Funny thing is, I didn't edit much.
     
  14. Master Automan IV

    Master Automan IV Phantasmal Quasar

    OHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH. I could only imagine what he... never mind.

    The original emoji was that waving tongue thing.:lickitung:
    I felt it was to lewd, so i changed it to winky face.:nuruwink:
     
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  15. Relten

    Relten The Waste of Time

     
  16. Master Automan IV

    Master Automan IV Phantasmal Quasar

    Da hell is that is that blue thing?
     
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  17. Firepaw Da Cat

    Firepaw Da Cat The Fluffy Cat

    Heh, I know, but you removed a sentence that I thought made it a bit more funny
     
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  18. Relten

    Relten The Waste of Time

    Alrighty...let me edit the post then.

    Edit:
    The post has been edited
     
  19. Master Automan IV

    Master Automan IV Phantasmal Quasar

    Look i did not mean it like [REMOVED FOLLOWING SENTENCE]. They can have their private fun times.
     
  20. Gilligan Lanley

    Gilligan Lanley Space Kumquat

    I know, I'm just joshing ya. :nuruwink:
    Or which other synonym people use for joking around. :nurutease:

    One would hope that it was private...
     
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