World of Aspects

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  1. PyreStarite

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    Disclaimer, everything here is of my Personal Universe, where just about all of my fictional characters live. All the lore here is essentially in constant development, and always shifting. Nothing here is really ever set in stone and is always open to change. My Universe hasn't been open to the public sense the Alpha Builds of Stone Hearth, but have been developing sense then. Either way...

    This first bit sets the stage as the world's "Creation Story" which plays off/inspired from the biblical creation story.

    Day 1: A Thought
    ...At the Beginning of time, there was nothing. A black void, occupied by emptiness, completely mute and desolate of anything. Then, in the barren, vacant space of the void, a thought appeared. That thought was named Sophia Avi, the wisest and most ancient of all the gods and the mother of the Divines. Sophia Avi took a piece of herself and set it free into the void, which it then split again making two, and the two pieces of herself became bright and shined like two stars in a blank sky. This was the First Day, and Sophia Avi had much work to do...

    Day 2: Twin Beacons
    ... The two pieces of Sophia Avi shined like diamonds in the darkness, then Ignis and Lux were born and the two gleaming objects grew to magnificent sizes, filling the hollow emptiness with two massive balls of fire and light. The brighter more luminescent orb of golden amber color was named the sun, and the fiery more passionate orb of hot red and orange color was named the Garden. This was the Second Day, and both Ignis and Lux grew tired and went to rest.

    Day 3: Endless Ocean
    ...the Garden and her sister stood quiet and radiant the void, glowing and leaving a warmth in the boundless nothingness, then Undine was born and she wrapped the Spark in rolling waves and oceans, extinguishing the great flames and forced it to hide beneath the rock that formed over it. This was the Third Day, and then Undine grew tired and went to rest.

    Day 4: Stone Spires
    ...the oceans that covered the Garden cascaded endlessly over an infinite blue sea that never rested, crashing, lapsing, tossing, and turning for eternity, then Terra was born, she rose cliffs out of the sea and formed land. Mountains spired above the water and kissed the fickle clouds in the sky and the valleys embraced and bathed in the vast open void above. This was the Third Day, and then Terra grew tired and went to rest...

    Day 5: Life Emerges
    ...the Garden laid barren and sterile like the sky above it, accompanied by the jagged Spires that dominated the rocky landscape and gazed upon all there was, then Vita was born and she breathed into the softened soil and life emerged from it and painted the land vibrant shades of green. Trees appeared and bore fruit, grass rolled across the hills like waves, and the animals ate from the feast that was nurtured by the soil. This was the Fourth Day, and then Vita grew tired and went to rest...

    Day 6: Dusk Approaches
    ...the Spark basked in the light of its sister and only companion, the sun, keeping company in the awe of the looming abyss, its appetite ever growing. The black veil covered the land and expanded over the seas, the sky was left desolate and the surface vulnerable to it, but the goddess' greatest accomplishment, the Garden, thrived and flourished in the emptiness. This prosperity would prove finite, however, as the stir that the goddesses had created woke an ancient hunger. Voro Avi, the Great Devourer, had at last awoken, and she looked upon the Garden with an insatiable hunger, and she said to them...

    "I created nothing, and nothing I shall return the world to."

    The Divines, weary and tired, stood before Voro Avi ready to defend their creation from her powerful appetite. Like them, though, Voro Avi was sluggish as well, having just awoken from her long slumber, so she gazed up on the five goddesses and took pieces of their essence and they collapsed. She fused their essences with her own, and in the process gave birth to five new children, the Malum. and sent them to reak havoc on the Garden. This was the Sixth Day, and Voro Avi grew tired and went to rest.

    Day 7: Violent Storm
    ..the air ran and chased itself through the garden, knocking over trees and carrying away smaller animals. Light fell from the clouds like rain but crashed into the surface with terrible power. Scylla, the oldest of the Malum, danced and ran through the fields and forests with endless spirit, and where ever she ran, the wind followed her, and when she danced her dance of dynamic vigor, hurricanes formed and shattered all around her. This was the Seventh Day, and Scylla grew tired and went to rest.

    Day 8: Coldest Night
    ...the rain and water in the Garden froze and turned into snow. The lakes and rivers that ran through it became solid and still. The animals inside the Garden became cold and suffered in the sudden winter. Everything that Heima came near turned to ice. Permafrost formed over the soil and hail fell from the clouds.Snowstorms erupted and covered the
    land in sheets of white and left everything caught in it cold. This was the Eighth Day, and Heima grew tired and went to rest.

    Day 9: Steeled Intent
    ...the soil became hard in the Garden, and in some places, it became even harder. The corrupted soil became harder than the rock that composed the tallest mountains or the bones of the toughest creature. The sharpest mind among all the Divines and Malum, Mercury, transformed soil and rock into metal which could not be cut by the mightiest beast or washed away by the most extreme torrent. Having created this perplexing material, she scattered metal talons across the Garden that were sharper than hunter's fangs. This was the Ninth Day, and Mercury grew tired and went ot rest.

    Day 10: Mortal Day
    ...the sun grew ever more weary watching over the Garden, and Lux grew too weaker each passing day until she could no longer keep the sun in the sky anymore. Lux succumbed to her fatigue and fell asleep, thus the sun fell out of the sky and the Garden was shrouded in darkness, and then Umbra and Anima were born, the youngest of the Malum.

    was born when the sun set and could no longer wash the Garden in its light, but while nothing could see in the pitch black the world had become, Umbra could see, when she was about to join her sisters in chaos, she stopped and gazed upon the untouched landscape in front of her and she fell in love with the beauty of the world that the Divines had built, and was so moved by it that the world around her began to glow a little just so she could see it better.

    When Anima was born, she walked among the dying animals and shattered trees. She looked upon the devastation created by the Malum and became sympathetic, and she tried to heal them. She looked upon the plants and the animals who were already injured from the ravages of the hurricanes and snow storms and metal talons and she released them from the pain they had endured and died peacefully, which Terra took them back into the soil which they came. This was the Tenth Day, and both Anima and Umbra grew tired and went to rest.

    ...When Sophia Avi looked down upon the Garden, shattered by the Malum, and saw Anima and Umbra not acting like the rest, she fashioned a plan that would save the dying world from destruction at the hands of Voro Avi and her children. The Chief Goddess appeared before Anima and Umbra , which filled them both with fear and shock, but to their surprise Sophia Avi simply asked them if they would like to help her and the Divines save the world that they had created. This shocked Umbra and Anima even more as well as confused them, but Sophia Avi said to them that if they helped calm down the other Malum, then they can help make the world beautiful again, and help ease the pain of the life being destroyed. Anima and Umbra turned and stared into each other, thought it over, until they both turned back toward Sophia Avi and agreed to help her.

    Umbra began by throwing an orb into the sky in the likeness of what she believed to be the sun, but she could not make it bright enough to completely illuminate what remained of the Garden, but it was still bright enough that everyone could see better than they could before, so she held the faint orb up in the sky with pride and called it the moon.

    Sophia Avi and Anima appeared before Scylla who was sprinting wild and creating whirl winds in the process. Anima asked Scylla to stop as she was hurting the life around her, but she ignored her and started spinning in circles and which began to create a cyclone. Sophia Avi, however, simply asked her if she could run in bigger circles, which Scylla looked at her confused as she ran, but complied, and the wind grew weaker. Sophia Avi asked her if she could run in even bigger circles, and Scylla made it so, and the torrent of wind became a soft breeze the further out she ran.

    Sophia Avi and Anima then appeared before Mercury, who had expected their arrival and built a fortress of thorns to protect herself. Anima asked her to come out and remove the thorns from the Garden, but Mercury refused and materialized more thorns around her. Sophia Avi, however, simply called out to Mercury and asked her if she would like to play a puzzle game. Mercury peered over here sharpened battlements with a baffled expression, then reluctantly asking what the conditions of the game were. Sophia Avi stated that if Mercury could solve three riddles, then she would be left be and the metal thorns would remain, but if she got three riddles wrong, then the metal would be allowed to remain but must be returned back to the ground in which it came from. Mercury complies with vigor, feeling confident in her own intellect.

    "I'll start with something simple. What can run but not walk?" asked Sophia Avi.
    "Easy, it's water." replied Mercury.

    "Very good, now, what goes around a tree but not through it?"
    Mercury stops for a moment, pondering the question.
    "...Um, I don't know. What?"
    "Bark" Sophia Avi answered.
    "Ohh, ok. Very well, that one was... ok."

    "As you desire. Say that a deer runs into a forest, how far does the deer go before it is no longer running into the forest?"
    "What?" Mercury asked in a confused tone. Sophia Avi repeated the question to her again.
    "Uhh, you can't answer that question without telling me how big the forest is."
    "I don't have to. The deer runs about half-way into the forest, then it is running out of the forest."
    Mercury, dumbfounded for a short while, exclaims "Wha-?! I should have known that one!"

    "He-heh, ready for your next riddle? She asks.
    "Say that same deer is standing on one side of a river, then it crosses the river without getting wet or using a bridge or a boat. How?"
    "Uh... um..." Mercury looks away, thinking to herself, her eyes wondering over the white snowscape illuminated by the moonlight cast by Umbra, until she snaps back around exclaiming "The River Is Frozen!"

    "Very good, its two to two now, are you ready for the tie breaker?" asked Sophia Avi.
    Mercury nodes, her eyes intent, focused, and alert on her next question.
    "What belongs to you, but others use more often than you?"
    Her face becomes blank, her voice silent. A few seconds pass, then she turns around, and more seconds pass by. In the background, Scylla is having the time of her life as always.
    Mercury, with gloom in her voice, slowly replies "I... I don't know." She turns around to face Sophia Avi. "Tell me! What Is The Answer?! I Want To Know!" she exclaims, frustration evident.
    "Your name." she answered. "My what?" Mercury returned, and Sophia Avi explained "Your name is what is yours but others use more than you." A sigh of relief escapes from Mercury's mouth, her head hanging with dread.

    "That is two to three, so I win, now will you return the metal to the ground like you promised?" asked Sophia Avi.
    A short pause is present, then Mercury in a long tone replies "...very well..."
    Then the metal talons receded back into the ground which they came from.

    While this occurred, Heima watched from a distance behind a broken tree line. She witnessed the Divines and all of her sisters were in the Garden playing games together, and this made Heima grow with great envy that she was ignored. She believed that all the other goddesses disliked her because whatever she got near turned into ice. Heima grew very upset at this idea and began to cry. After she had wept her pain away, she picked herself up and traveled to the farthest part of land she could travel to, and the snow followed her.

    When Voro Avi awoke again and realized what had happened, that her daughters had abandoned her and their mission, she was filled with rage. She declared that her daughters, the Malum, were all traitors, and that they would be devoured along side the Divines and the Garden. The Malum grew fearful for their existance, but Anima quickly wove a net crafted out of thousands of smaller lights and threw it into the sky above the garden so that Voro Avi could not reach the Garden. When Voro Avi was blocked out, she grew furious and swore then that she would never stop trying to return the world to nothing.

    Eventually, Lux awoke from her slumber, and the sun rose back into the sky when she did, and Anima was relieved as she did not need to hold the moon or the stars up anymore. When she looked around, she was surprised to find herself in a world that was not actively being destroyed, let alone the disbelief that the Divines and the Malum had made peace with each other.

    This was the final day of creation, and the goddesses went to rest.

    Need to add part where the goddesses quarrel a bit.

    With the Garden safe, Voro'avi banished, and the war between the Divines and the Malum over, the goddesses grew incredibly weary and jaded. The war they fought that destroyed the Heartland left them drained and maintaining the Garden and keeping it in a state of balance in the new found peace was taxing. The peace would be short lived, however, as Voro'avi had already discovered a new way into the Garden. By splitting off pieces of her insatiable hunger and infinite influence, Voro'avi slipped the fragments of herself through the gaps in the net of stars that Anima had woven. The fragments of her apatite fell from the night sky as giant pods of black and purple slime which burst upon impact with the world. The masses of goo and muck that formed from the remains of the pods then rose and took the form of heinous abominations who's only purpose was to consume in the place of their creator, Voro'avi.

    Monsters now roamed the Garden and resumed the battle the Malum had started, only this time there was no playing. The goddesses, exhausted and jaded, longed to rest once more, but the new threat prohibited them from doing so. The goddesses gathered one last time and decided to create their own creature to help them protect the new world they wanted to build. Terra and Undine created clay from the barren rock and sand forged by conflict, then the goddesses shaped the clay into their likeness, and then Vita breathed life into the them. This was the birth of Mortality, and the goddesses each gave the mortals gifts for them to keep.

    Lux gave them pride so they could find satisfaction, Ignis gave them passion so they could love, Undine gave them serenity so they could find peace, Terra gave them confidence so they could stand, and Vita gave them compassion for the things around them. Scylla gave them courage to face their hardest challenges, Heima gave them solidarity so they could find unity in each other, Mercury gave them inspiration to help them find new roads, Anima gave them gratitude and solace in dire times, and Umbra gave them luck for when skill can't pull them through. Then Sophi'avi approached and gave them gnawledge... I mean wisdom so they could learn and understand, and taught them how to harness the magical energies found in the Garden.

    When the mortals had received all of their gifts from the goddesses, Voro'avi, using all of her might and willpower, temporarily broke through the barrier of the bright blue sky. When she appeared before the mortals she said to them "In order to truly be like your gods, you have to act like them. They are hiding from you what you truly need to be their true image" and before the goddesses could stop her, Voro'avi gave her own gifts to the mortals. She gave them prejudice, anger, malice, laziness, greed, envy, grief, solitude, doubt, sadness, fear, and ignorance. As soon as Voro'avi had completed the task she had set out to do, she was gone. Despite the goddesses' best effort to undo the damage, the mortals were infected with the seeds of corruption.

    Need to add the part where the goddesses go their separate directions and the mortals follow.

    That would be about all I have for right now. Please, feed back is welcome, if you have a revision idea, I'm always open to suggestions to story or lore, but nothing so drastic or crazy. At this point in time I'm mainly looking for better names and writing help, but by all means, try anything. I would rather something stupid than nothing at all.

    Finally, I've been writing this slowly for months.
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  2. PyreStarite

    PyreStarite Pangalactic Porcupine

    Voro'avi; goddess of the Void, Emptiness, No Light,

    Sophi'avi; goddess of Wisdom, the Known, the Unknown,

    Lux; goddess of the Sun, High Light, Radiance,

    Ignis; goddess of Fire, Passion,

    Undine; goddess of Water, the Sea, Fish, Harvest,

    Terra; goddess of Ground, the Land, Stone,

    Vita; goddess of Life, Fertility,

    Scylla; goddess of Storms, Wind, Lightning, Tempests, Birds,

    Mercury; goddess of

    Heima; goddess of Snow, Ice, Hail, Cold,

    Anima; goddess of Death, After Life,

    Umbra; goddess of the Moon, the Stars, Low Light,

    Dire Wolf
    "Lizard Wolf"

    Great Serpent
    Great "Shark"
    Walking "Plesiosaur"
    Armored "Plesiosaur"
    Armored Walking "Plesiosaur"

    "Terror Talon or Sky Terror"

    Stone Soldiers
    Weeping Angel
    Wood Soldiers

    I haven't work out a proper name, but I sometimes call them "Traitors, Traitor-kin, Void-bound, Voro-kin,
    Lich (Eternal Life/Power)
    Succubus/Incubus (Eternal Beauty/Desire)
    Vampire (Eternal Beauty/Youth)
    Werewolf (Infinite Strength/Power)

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    This isn't staying.

    "Drake of the Frostfang Clan"
    "Silvia of the Valley of the Moon"

    lost in translation...

    (Chapter 1)
    Percy Starite - (Imagine Dragons) Warriors
    Riley Starite
    Raven "Mikichiru"
    Elizabeth Greater
    Adrienne Silas
    "Inigo Hansson" (Tots want a much more "English" name, like Elizabeth.)
    "Fredrick Kramer"
    "Cody Ferrara"

    (Chapter 2)
    Percy Starite - (Skillet) Lucy
    Elizabeth Greater
    Riley Starite

    (Chapter 3)
    Percy Starite - (We As Human) Dead Man -then- (Nine Lashes) Love Me Now -then- (Skillet) Hero
    Elizabeth Greater
    Riley Starite
    Raven "Mikichiru"
    "Inigo Hansson"
    "Izu" Starite (Want something that sounds European but very fiery and hotheaded.)
    "Matthew" Starite (Want something that screams more "POWA!" and commander/general/leader-like.)

    (Chapter Uncertain)
    Harold... something... the dark mage.

    Percy Starite
    Elizabeth Greater - (Regina Spektor) The Call (Nightcore, mostly for the image. Song kinda works too.)
    Lindsay, Hope, and Isabelle Starite (Collective) - (SVRCINA) Battlefield (Nightcore for extra squeakiness.)

    Baldy McBaldface (Oops, I mean Spencer) and Joey (A Grill)

    These are random quotes from the story. Very much so incomplete, I will be adding quotes as I have time and remembering them.

    "Stop running, Please! I miss you..."
    "You... Will... Not. Touch. My. DAUGHTER!"
    "It was YOU! I feel it in my very BEING... You killed my BROTHER!"
    "I don't know why, it just... feels as though I owe you a debt... and doing this is helping to repay it."
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  4. Pangaea

    Pangaea Prypiat

    I love creation myths so this was right up my alley. Really neat ideas. I can see the influence from the Bible. I don't really have any advice at the moment but I do look forward to reading more of your mythos.
  5. PyreStarite

    PyreStarite Pangalactic Porcupine

    Thank you. I updated my Exterminus thread just recently and now more content for Aspects is up next when I can secure time.
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    I made this as a very rough draft of what the "holy land" looks like after a few ages. This is what the garden becomes after the war and the disappearance of the gods.

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    I'm sorry I haven't been updating this thread... at all. I just don't want to force myself to write, and time is already a resource I don't have enough of.
    I turned post #3 into a character log, mainly consisting of names and some (almost all Percy) with songs I feel represent them. Arc 3 is the largest and most developed followed by Arc 4. Arc 3 follows the adventure of Percy Starite and his allies as they charge foolishly into a dangerous world looking for fame and adventure. Arc 4 follows Hope, the child of Percy who somehow defies the laws of everything and survives his adventure only to hand the torch to his daughter.
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    PyreStarite Pangalactic Porcupine

    I found some old notes manuscripts detailing the laws of magic, mainly the crystalline form, shards.
    Word for word from notes manuscripts.
    • Offensive spells are called curses.
    • Defensive spells are called prayers.
    • For curses, the shard is held high and focused toward the direction the caster is facing.
    • For prayers, the shard is held close to the caster's chest and focused forward.
    • Shards occur naturally in the world, when immense amounts of raw magical energy condense and form in a small crystalline prism.
    • These shards can store and release energy that is compatible with the shard. Recharge rates are dependent on the environment.
    • The type of magical energy a shard can handle is dependent on the environment the shard is formed in.
    • Certain environments tend to be abundant with certain energies.
    • In order to cast a spell, or harness the energies inside of the shard, the energy needs a form of "instructions" to tell the energy how to behave or act, lest it just dump the energy.
    • Destroying a shard will dump the stored energy into the environment.
    • Runes are basic forms of instruction for energy.
    • Magic Circles are complex forms of instruction for energy that utilize runes and flow structures.
    • Energy can be forcefully condensed, but can cause void contamination.
    I can more or less reconfirm everything that was written then, but a few corrections or comments would be...
    • Destroying a shard with a spell encoded into it will expel the magical energy according to what was previously written on the shard. In other words, it will cast one last spell in one big blaze of glory going out.
    • Shards occur naturally, and their element is jurisdicted by their environment, but they form in the ground, not out of thin air.
    • Magical energy comes in like 11 flavors; light, fire, water, ground, life, storm, ice, metallic, spirit, and dark.
    • Certain environments are abundant with certain energies, like hot areas are abundant with lots of fire energy, so many fire shards are formed in hot areas. Even then, shards are uncommon to find or get a hold of.
    • I don't remember the exact effects of "void contamination"
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  9. Pangaea

    Pangaea Prypiat

    So, can anyone use shards? Are there schools to teach people proper usage of runes and magic circles? Can a shard contain more than one kind of magical energy? What's an example of a curse? A prayer?

    Cool stuff! Keep it up!
  10. PyreStarite

    PyreStarite Pangalactic Porcupine

    Let me try to answer those in order, as it would be beneficial in more than one way.
    1. Yes, technically anyone can use shards, but I don't want it to be as easy as waving a shard in the air and they cast inferno. I need some balance to make spells more difficult to use and to where someone that has never cased a spell before can case a end game spell if handed to them.
    2. Yes, there are schools and colleges for teaching magic, but the two spell-flinging heroes of arc 3 are home taught using tomes that their parents shipped over to them.
    3. I am not in favor of a shard holding two types of energy, but I don't have anything to support or deny this motion yet.
    4. An example of a curse is like Fireball or Torrent. Hexes are a specific type of curse that are more focused on debuffs like sickness or weakness.
    5. An example of a prayer is like Heal or Stone Wall. Blessings are a specific type of prayer that more focus on buffs like healing or toughness.
    In my world, I don't want magic to be something that any peasant can pick up immediately. I want mages to be rare and disciplined in the ways of the magical arts (At least in the earlier periods, before magic rifles constructed during the time of mass production and replaceable parts emerges) and for warrior to be a legitimate trade. I want magic to not only be hard, but dangerous, to both enemies and the caster. Casting a spell requires the training and know-how that needs to be taught and passed on. I also want the threat of mis-casting a spell, such as using the wrong magic word could cause the spell to react violently. Prayers are much less dangerous to use as extreme cases of back firing to be far and few generally among lower level spells, but at the same time I don't want magical mending to replace physical medication entirely, so I would nerf healing spells to have a much more temporary or fleeting effect. I would use healing spells as a temporary or reactionary method of healing wounds but not an intimidate or permanent fix. I want healing spells to be able to close up wounds and heal cuts but continued stress and stretching of the damaged flesh would only cause the wounds to open back up again. Doing this would allow magical mending to be very useful but after battle medication and physical mending to be a necessity for proper healing. I also was reluctant at first to use the term blessings for buffs as I had already reserved blessings for gifts bestowed upon mortals by the goddesses, referring only to those gifts that act more as permissions to use certain forms that certain races are known for using.
    That also brings me to racial forms, and races for that matter. I want there to be races in my world, kind of like the player races in Alfheim featured in swordartonline. The races would be "descendants" or followers of certain goddesses and their teachings, like how the children of Undine would be the "Mermaids" I use quotations because I am looking to morph that word a little to fit in a little more. Mermaids are a race that like to live near lots and lots of water, but are the main majority in the western archipelago, and their racial blessing is the sea form which allows them to transform the lower half of their body via spell to that of a fish and gills, or what we already know of as Mermaids. More advanced or alternate blessings exist such as one for webbed feet, fingers, and gills, or what I call the Nereid form. These racial forms are bestowed upon individuals generally shortly after birth during a "baptism" by a priest or priestess, where they ask the goddess in mind to bless the child with their gift. Racial forms are generally blessings bestowed by the goddesses onto their children that allow them to more easily survive or thrive in extreme environments like underwater or deep underwater for Mermaids. The same also works for the other races like "Snowmen", "Salamanders", "Gnomes", "Angles", "Harpies", etc. Each race is distinguishable based on their physical features like skin tone, hair and eye color, and accessories like long ears and horns. "Blood Elves" or "Death Elves" or whatever I am going to settle on calling them are known for being pale white with hair as dark as coal, eyes red like blood, and horns and quite commonly inhabit the Labyathia region.

    Let me recap at what I just threw out; Spells powerful, but difficult and dangerous. The Goddesses have child races that they give blessings to. Each race has a form that they can transform part of their body into, otherwise they all have the same body shape, but not color.
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    Inkarnate, the site I used to make the first map, has stopped working, as well as has changed significantly sense I last used it, but I maybe able to salvage the map I was working on.
    It has stopped working in a sense that I can't edit this image any more, and it is not where I would like this. Consider this very much so expected to change. I might need to start over, however.
    EDIT: Scratch that, the site has taken massive steps backwards. I'm using photoshop and painting it myself.
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    Racial Traits

    Potential Names - Angels, Light Elves,
    Divine Blessings - Light Cure (birth. Healing talent) and Light Wings (adv. High level flight)
    Appearance - Pale Beige Skin, Gold Hair, Gold Eyes,
    Specialties - Magical Mending and Flight.
    Environment - Warm Sunny Plains, Meadows, and Highlands.
    Disposition - Devout, Vain, "High and Mighty", Purist, "Thinks their goddess is the best goddess", "I'm not biased",
    Culture Notes -

    Potential Names - Salamanders, Heat Elves, Flame Elves, Salamen,
    Divine Blessings - Heat Resistance (birth. Resistance to Heat) and Heat Skin (adv. Bonus Resistance to Heat) (The user of Heat Skin grows scales around their body to resist heat better)
    Appearance - "Sunburned", Dry, and Rough Skin or Dark Tan Skin, Red Hair, Red Eyes,
    Specialties - Physical Might and Magical Might.
    Environment - Hot Deserts, Volcanic Land, and Canyons.
    Disposition - Passionate, Daring, Quarrelsome,
    Culture Notes - Strong and proud, they never back down. They are passionate about what they do.

    Potential Names - Mermaids, Sea Elves, Mermen,
    Divine Blessings - Sea Form (birth. Transform the lower half of the body to that of an aquatic tail and add gills) and Lake Form (adv. Webbed feed and hands)
    Appearance - Tan Skin, Blue Hair, Blue Eyes,
    Specialties - Agility? and Magical Mending.
    Environment - Tropical Coasts, Islands, and Lakes.
    Disposition - Calm, Relaxed, Easy Going,
    Culture Notes - They live close to the sea as their lives center around it. Because of their Sea Form, they do not wear any kind of pants and instead elect to wear skirts.

    Potential Names - Gnomes, Dwarves, Deep Elves, Stone Elves, Gnomen,
    Divine Blessings - erm...
    Appearance - Tan...ish-like Skin, Brown Hair, Brown Eyes, Short or "Fun Sized",
    Specialties - Physical Might and Physical Toughness.
    Environment - Cool Canyons, Mountains, and Ravines.
    Disposition - Calm, Sturdy, Mild,
    Culture Notes - They live close to the (I don't want to say the word Earth, because this isn't Earth.) They commonly carve out homes in mountains and at the base of cliffs.

    Potential Names - (Originally) Elves, Wood Elves,
    Divine Blessings - Living Cure (birth. Healing talent) and Whisper (adv. Understand the emotions of animals)
    Appearance - Green/Peach/Pink Hair, Eyes,
    Specialties - Physical Mending and Magical Mending.
    Environment - Anywhere warm with lots and lots of trees and animals.
    Disposition - "All life is precious", "The plants and animals are more important than you are",
    Culture Notes - They live closely with nature, disturbing it as little as possible. They value life very highly as a sacred gift bestowed by the divines.

    Potential Names - Harpies, Storm Elves, Wind Elves,
    Divine Blessings - Wind Form (birth. Transforms the arms into wings and shins into talons) (How much of a bird am I willing to go here?) and Storm Form (adv. High level flight)
    Appearance - Green, Aquamarine, and yellow Hair and Eyes,
    Specialties - Agility and Physical Might.
    Environment - Tall cliffs, Mountains, Plateaus.
    Disposition - Sprightly, Energetic, Adventurous, Whimsical,
    Culture Notes - They live where the sky is most open to them and the wind is strong.

    Potential Names - Snowmen, Snow Elves, Frost Elves,
    Divine Blessings - Cold Resistance (birth. Resistance to Cold) and Cold Skin (adv. Bonus resistance to Cold) (The user of Cold Skin grows hair around the body to resist cold better)
    Appearance - Pale Blue, White Blue, or White Hair and Eyes,
    Specialties - Magical Might and Magical Toughness.
    Environment - Cold Tundras, Taiga, and Arctic.
    Disposition - Solitary, Isolationists,
    Culture Notes - They live in the coldest climates, alone from the rest of the world. They are excellent hunters of large game.

    Potential Names - (Originally) Mercanaries, Metal Elves, Steel Elves because why not.
    Divine Blessings - Inspiration (birth) and not enough is really known.
    Appearance - Silver Hair and Eyes,
    Specialties - Physical Toughness and Crafting.
    Environment - Cities, Towns, and Settlements.
    Disposition - Intelligent, Creative, Resourceful,
    Culture Notes - Very few of the Mercanaries are left, as their capital was ravaged by the monster hordes. Not even the finest smiths could prepare them for the onslaught that occurred that night...

    Potential Names - (Had no good normal name), Blood Elves, Death Elves,
    Divine Blessings - and Seance (adv. Speak with the departed)
    Appearance - Pale White Skin, Charcoal Black Hair, Red/Red-Orange/Red-Violet Eyes, Horn, "Devil" Tail?
    Specialties - Magical Might and Necromancy.
    Environment - Hot Savannah, Swamps, and Barrens.
    Disposition -
    Culture Notes - They care deeply for life and hate to see it die, and that is why they consider it their duty to safeguard and protect all life's passage into death.

    Potential Names - (Originally) Succubi, Imps, Dark Elves, Night Elves,
    Divine Blessings - Night Vision (birth. Improved vision in darkness) and Shadow Cloak (adv. Grants temporary predator invisibility cloaking)
    Appearance - Dull Blue Skin, Night Black Hair, Purple Eyes, Horns, "Devil" Tail?
    Specialties - Agility and Illusions.
    Environment - Dark Forests, Caves, and other places with low light.
    Disposition - Sprightly (During Night),
    Culture Notes - They like to sleep during the day

    Potential Names - Mutts
    Divine Blessings - Good luck with that.
    Appearance - Throw their parents into a blender and see what comes out.
    Specialties - Hahahahahaha.
    Environment - Where ever they haven't been kicked out of.
    Disposition - Wishing they were never born.
    Culture Notes - It is considered acceptable to marry one from another race at least once, but a child with the blood of 3 or more races is looked down upon and considered an outcast with no place to call home. Most mutts end up orphaned or becoming mercenaries or bandits because they are not allowed to stay anywhere. To be called a mutt is an insult because it is viewed that any child with the blood of 3 or more races is impure, unclean, and talentless, as well as it saying that your mother and their mothers slept around alot.

    I'm playing around with the idea that the more pure an individual's blood is, the pointier their ears are, because ADJ Elf just seems to keep appearing everywhere. Also, mutts end up randomly getting traits from their parents and ancestors, such as appearance, disposition, "stats", and resistances. Also, no individual is defined by their racial disposition or specialty, as some may feel differently or choose to take a different stance on a matter. Yes, I am introducing racism into my world, but with my theme I am trying to be realistic about the Ancient (Act 1), Classical (Act 2), Medieval (Act 3), and Renaissance (Act 4) periods. Yes, some races hate each other, some more than others, some less than others, like the feud between angels and harpies or how mermaids are always picking on salamanders. I am going for realism in human behavior, with one's faith in their goddess and their race and hatred in their rivals, and of course to make this ironic, everyone has to hate the wrong enemy.

    Alot of information in here is still missing. I will prolly have to come up with filler later or I could get help from the lovely audience.
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  13. Pangaea

    Pangaea Prypiat

    Some really good stuff here. I think you've got some great potential in these different races and the things involved with such a variety of creatures. I'd be interested to learn more about the "monster hordes" and how they impact the world. For instance, where did they come from? Why did they attack the Mercanaries? Etc. I also like that you're playing with ideas about "pure blood" and "racism" and "mutts". One of my own series of stories deals with such things (racism between elves and humans/ those of mixed-race being outcasts) and I'll be interested to see how you address them!

    I've noticed that it seems like you're approaching your world building in game-like ideas. For instance, "stats" and using terms like "buff" and "debuff" to describe different magics. Do you find it easier to relate ideas to game-type structures? I wonder if there's a benefit to thinking in game terms or not.
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  14. PyreStarite

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    I think that the monsters would be better explained when I write... Act 3... carp, I've been using Acts twice. So there are the world origin stories with the goddesses and malum and then there are the stories about the mortals that came after, just that I have been using the term "Act" for both of them unintentionally.

    Getting back on track, the monster hordes attack mortals because that is the purpose of their existence. Pure blood was in my earlier designs, but I have struggled with certain racial traits like pointy ears, horns, tails, and skin tones, like how I haven't found an excuse to include black people (our black people, the chocolate variety). I have white people, white white people, people that look like they have a sunburn for a skin tone, and blue people, so maybe I should just... I don't know, I am just lacking the sense and excuses.

    The way I have it set up now, Angels don't like the children of the malum, Salamanders, Mermaids, and Snowmen hate each other, nothing much left of the Mercanaries, Gnomes don't care too much, Blood Elves got exiled to Labythia, and Dark Elves are in a constant state of hiding.

    Yes, I do find it easier to explain things like as if it were a game, even though that is not how I would want the story to be told.

    Also, do you see those two continents on the notfinalversion map? I want the races to span between both of those worlds, but the cultures to be significantly different. Mainly I want the west "Holy Land/Place of Beginnings" to be more our world western culture while I want the east to be more our world eastern culture, where they for some reason build houses and clothes out of paper. Paper!
  15. Pangaea

    Pangaea Prypiat

    Bolded for emphasis.

    First, you shouldn't have to come up with an excuse. If your world logically includes "black people" then it includes them. If it doesn't then it doesn't. Coming up with an excuse to include them would be forcing them where they don't belong and is obviously undesirable. I understand the desire to include them might come from a desire to have things more realistic or relatable but remember this: you are god. This universe is completely made by you, including the rules for everything. The physics of our reality don't apply to your world. Or they do, but only in the capacity that you want them to (hence the existence of magic there but not here). So, if you want to include "black people" then include them if it makes sense. It's literally up to you if their existence is logical or not. If you want to include them solely for some kind of politically correct/diversity reason then don't do it. You'd be including them just for the sake of including them. You'd be forcing them in and they would always be second-class characters with no actual purpose to your stories regardless of what roles you might give them.

    Secondly, what's to stop them from existing for the same reason they exist in our world? People who live in very sunny areas will (over many generations) be darker-skinned. Those who live where there is less sunlight will develop lighter skin tones. At some point you could have variance in your races to include lighter and darker tones dependent on where in the world they live. This, of course, goes back to what I said in my first point. The whole "sunny = dark" doesn't have to be true for your world. But it would be a logical reason to include "black people" in your world that anyone could understand without much exposition on your part. In fact, you could play with it and have only certain races be susceptible to developing darker skin tones over the generations. Again, you're god. It's up to you.

    I was wondering about the map, actually. Does each race live exclusively in their preferred areas or do some spread out and live amongst those of other races? Kind of like how we have different ethnic groups living together in our world, especially in large cities. Would this also be true there?

    And one other thing. It doesn't make sense to build houses out of paper. There's a lot of processing and expenditure to make paper. It would be faster, cheaper, and easiest to just use the wood directly from a tree. Unless you have some in-universe reason for using paper that makes sense.
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  16. PyreStarite

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    I just wanted to be inclusive... but I will stick to logic. I want the skin tones to more reflect the race's adaptations to certain aspects... elements. Maybe I could so something like alternate tones for races like salamander or gnome but I know for certain it isn't going to be angel or dark elf. I understand that sunny = dark but for what I have set up right now and am pretty set on it doesn't work with what I have, like how angels worship the sun all day every day but stay pale and blood elves live in a hot area that almost rivals salamander territory. Maybe I can have more sun exposure leads to slightly darker tones just for variety, but sub-races are an idea I play with. With dark elves and blood elves I tossed around the dull blue and pale white between them for a while because they both reminded me of corpses and then decided that the dull blue suited the dark race more. Fun note, Ignis and Lux are twins and Umbra and Anima are twins, making their races sister races to each other as well.
    Some do, but most prefer to live in their comfortable environment, like how you won't find a snowman in a desert as that kind of environment is hostile to them, but how the cold never bothered them anyway. Some races can live in other areas like a gnome and an angel, but others are at a total disadvantage in areas that are hostile to them, like a mermaid without access to large quantities of water, or a salamander caught out in the middle of the water. Another fun note, Percy and Riley are perpetually terrified of large bodies of water.
    Welcome to japan. I want the west to reflect our west and the east to reflect our east, but in a different manner that will allow events to transpire differently as in this world humanity... elfanity? Whatever, began in the heart of western "Holy Land" only to expand eastward and settle in places they were best suited to. The west will be as culturally diverse as the east and the way one race would do things would be different on the other continent, like how the same job of maintaining a temple or place of worship is called a priestess in one land and a shrine maiden in another. When I make the new map I will try to include a migration mode to reflect the movement of people from areas and times, which could help explain why dark elves in the west are so different in the east and why snowmen in the east are so much more different from other eastern cultures. On another note, chuck it on top of the pile of things I need to write, proper magic usage and how magic shards aren't everything and where mortals get their magical power.
  17. Pangaea

    Pangaea Prypiat

    Well, yeah I know about Japan. For some reason I was thinking of houses made entirely out of paper. Silly me. (;

    Being able to see the migration of peoples would be really neat!
  18. PyreStarite

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    Aspect, Location, Environment, Name, Government, Inspired Culture.
    Light, Area 1, Rolling Plains and Meadows, Kingdom of N/A, Theocracy? British.
    Fire, Area 2, Desert Flood Plains, N/A, N/A. Spanish.
    Water, Area 3, Coast and Archipelago, N/A, N/A, Polynesian.
    Rock, Area 4, Cliffs and Mountains, N/A, N/A, Mild Dwarv-ish.
    Life, Area 5, Dense Tropical Forest, N/A, N/A, N/A.
    Gale, Area 6, Coast and Cliffs, N/A, N/A, N/A.
    Ice, Area 7, Tundra and Ice Plains, N/A, N/A, Nordic.
    Metal, Area 8, Coast and Plains, N/A, N/A, N/A.
    Blood, Labythia, Wasteland and Swamp, N/A, Federation, N/A.
    Dark, Area 10, Dark Woods and Extensive Cave Networks, N/A, N/A, Think Night Life.
    I am toying with the idea of giving French to the Wood Elves and German to the Gnomes, but am not confident with it yet. I haven't found an existing culture to compare the Harpies or Mercanaries to yet.

    Aspect, Location, Environment, Name, Government, Inspired Culture.
    Light, Area 11, Wide Open Meadows and Plains, Empire of the Sun, Empire, China.
    Fire, Metal, and Blood, Area 12, Desert and Plains, N/A, N/A, India, Arabian.
    Water, Area 13, Coast and Islands, N/A, N/A, Indonesia and Caribbean.
    Rock, Area 14, Mountains and Valleys, N/A, N/A, N/A.
    Life, Area 15, Dense Tropical Jungle, N/A, N/A, N/A.
    Gale, Area 16, Prolly Cliffs, N/A, N/A, N/A.
    Ice, Area 17, Tundra and Cold Plains, N/A, Republic, Russia.
    Dark, Area 18, Coastal Forests and Islands, N/A, N/A, Japan.
    I have Fire, Metal, and Blood living in the same area as I have lost the distinction in their territory, especially with this very unfinished and unsatisfactory map. They live in a similar climate, and they don't hate each other, so maybe it could work out.

    Hoo boy, this idea started out so well, now it looks like abstract art.
  19. PyreStarite

    PyreStarite Pangalactic Porcupine

    Ok, so I have a new map design drawn out and now I just need to actually draw and fill it out with shape and color. I am actually quite satisfied with where the map blueprint is right now, but knowing my experience with everything I make, it is going to end up looking like abstract art. I am going to be continuing to work on the prologue, the rules of magic, and the map. What I need is a proper name for the Wood Elves and the Blood Elves because I want to throw out the word elf entirely. Dark Elf doesn't need it anymore because I found them Imps, which I am semi-satisfied with.
  20. Pangaea

    Pangaea Prypiat

    Maybe you could base their name off their mother goddess? I can't think of anything at the moment but you could play around with it, see what you come up with.

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