Story The Chronicles of Bustow

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by The Squid, Nov 23, 2014.

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How do you feel about this whole thing?

  1. It's intoxicating

    2 vote(s)
    13.3%
  2. It's pretty darn good

    12 vote(s)
    80.0%
  3. Meh

    0 vote(s)
    0.0%
  4. I don't know what this is

    0 vote(s)
    0.0%
  5. собака

    1 vote(s)
    6.7%
  6. This sucks

    0 vote(s)
    0.0%
  7. I curse thee and all thy descendants, for thou hast committed an unspeakable crime

    0 vote(s)
    0.0%
  1. The Squid

    The Squid Oxygen Tank

    Added some more entries!
     
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  2. The Squid

    The Squid Oxygen Tank

    Entry #146 or whatever number I'm on is out! Enjoy!
     
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  3. Jareix Cryvix

    Jareix Cryvix The Waste of Time

    It's been too long...
     
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  4. The Squid

    The Squid Oxygen Tank

    Entry 147 contains references to materials not suitable for minors. It's important to the plot (I think) so I suggest reading it.
     
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  5. Zebe

    Zebe Space Kumquat

    It's back!


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    *heavy breathing hissing*
     
  6. Jareix Cryvix

    Jareix Cryvix The Waste of Time

    Ok! Censor that! That is NOT safe for work in the least!
     
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  7. Zebe

    Zebe Space Kumquat

    id tag it nsfw but for some reason that abbreviation doesnt work like it should around here
     
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  8. The Squid

    The Squid Oxygen Tank

    Entry 148 is here :D
     
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  9. The Squid

    The Squid Oxygen Tank

    Two new entries! I'm trying to revive the rotting carcass that is the fan-fiction forum :(
     
  10. SivCorp

    SivCorp Parsec Taste Tester

    Hopefully it doesn't fail like the corporation sub forum :(
     
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  11. Jareix Cryvix

    Jareix Cryvix The Waste of Time

    A cultist sacrifice? Ooh! I hope you'll be bringing in The Ruin at some point in this :sneaky:...
     
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  12. The Squid

    The Squid Oxygen Tank

    A few new entries added. Would anybody be interested in reading a completely reworked version of this story from like the beginning? Because I kind of want to do that.
     
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  13. Jareix Cryvix

    Jareix Cryvix The Waste of Time

    I certainly would not mind seeing that!
     
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  14. SivCorp

    SivCorp Parsec Taste Tester

    It has gotten a bit jumbled.... Perhaps a rewrite would be good.

    Can always use more practice too :)
     
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  15. Zebe

    Zebe Space Kumquat

    Yes. I'd read that.

    if i can suggest something for the reboot if you do that: using a few more spoilers for the entries could be an improvement. I'm getting lost when I scroll down there. And it takes an eternity to get to the bottom on mobile.
     
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  16. The Squid

    The Squid Oxygen Tank

    That's sort of why I wanted to do a re-write; I finally got around to coming up with a plot, but in order to get to that point I need to kill off several of the characters I've added in. Which could be somewhat problematic

    Was definitely planning on adding spoilers, since I write 90% of the entries on my phone.

    That being said, I'm gonna do it. School ended today, so now I have enough time on my hands to do stuff like this :DD
     
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  17. The Squid

    The Squid Oxygen Tank

    The first 10 entries of the remake are here! Keep in mind that I may edit them later (still not satisfied with entry 10, so don't read that). The next 10 entries are on the way.
     
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  18. Jareix Cryvix

    Jareix Cryvix The Waste of Time

    My only gripe is with how lenient the colony is. He'd've been shot for the camera thing for rebellious ideals, and there are no prisons other than the thought reassignment facilities and laboratories. Also, football and other such entertainment would not be legally allowed on the ship, nor would non-miniknog branded VIC-nog...
     
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  19. The Squid

    The Squid Oxygen Tank

    That's... That a good point that I hadn't thought of... But yeah, I'll probably change those parts at some point (especially the part about the jail... That's pretty important :p)
    And that, folks, is why you never write at 3 AM when you haven't slept in over 24 hours.
     
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  20. The Squid

    The Squid Oxygen Tank

    Oh boy... it's been like 3 or 4 months, and imma be honest, I forgot about all of my fan fictions and have gotten very little accomplished (except for a short story that was mostly just a starbound-themed writing excersize). But im gonna try to keep working on this, so idk I guess you could get excited or something :party:
     
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